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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Hacker or Virus (computer) (12/15/11)

TITLE: Out of the Ethereal, Electrical Ether
By Jim McWhinnie
12/29/11


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Out of the ethereal, electrical ether,
Out of the hum, the silent hum of electrons switching switches,
Out of the woven web of tangled transmissions of half-thought thoughts,
I draw forth the words of the invisible mind
with its indiscernible, indeterminable, indiscriminate plots,
And bring them to life in my pixilated poems in high-definition phosphor-ed phrases,
Lines and stanzas, spell-checked and Grammatik-ed, corrected in ways I did not intend,
no capitals here, but Here, this denied, I so tried and tried, to hide
from the Editor hidden deep inside,
And when, always inevitably, eventually when,
The demons that dance in the ghostly haunts of the cyber-moor,
Sneak into my world as sinister, secretive, skulking spies,
On silicon slippers and seductive silk-lies,
To slowly take over, to slowly take down,
To steal all my words and send them away in weeping good-byes,
The Tempter, Deceiver, this Satan Sublime,
“Why must you prey on my memory and devour my soul!”




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bo Jennings12/29/11
Excellent choice of many power words! Electrifying and enjoyable. Fast pace, absolutely, no lingering and right to the magnetic energy. I enjoyed. Very much. No falling asleep.
Allison Egley 12/30/11
Nice job with this one.

I had a bit of trouble following this, but that may just be me. :)

I liked the alliteration.
Camille (C D) Swanson 12/30/11
Love short direct powerful entries, and this was all of that and more. Great job. Thanks! God Bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 01/04/12
This is really intense. You said quite a bit with few words.
Linda Goergen01/04/12
This poem is interesting. Almost too much alliteration to get a clear picture...but then again, the alliteration throughout really keeps this moving at a fast pace, like thoughts would flash through a mind and like a virus spreads...so very interesting presentation. I enjoyed the read.