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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Download/Upload (11/17/11)

TITLE: My Brother's Keeper
By Leola Ogle


Dean raked his fingers through his hair, or, at least, he would have if it had not been cropped so short. He stared at the screen in front of him, and sighed deeply, the sound akin to a groan, reverberating in the room like the ominous chords of music from a horror movie.

What was he going to do? A part of him wished he had never sat down and turned on the computer. Mixed emotions surged through him Ė anger, sorrow, shock, bewilderment, disbelief. He had moved his family across country to help his twin brother, David, with his ministry. Now this!

It had been a surprise to the whole family when David had resigned his successful pastorate on the west coast and taken a position at a floundering church in the east. David implemented some new things and had the church on an even keel when he had called Dean and asked him to come out and help him.

Although their parents had been pastors, Dean had never felt called to be a pastor like David had. David had a pastorís heart. Dean, on the other hand, was an excellent business administrator. It was for precisely that reason that David begged him to come out.

After much prayer, and waiting for his wife, Carol, to be in agreement, Dean had pulled up stakes and relocated with their two small children. The church flourished under the combined leadership of David and Dean. Carol and the children had made the adjustments, and life was good - at least until today.

David had been preoccupied and distant lately, but Dean hadnít attached any significance to it. It wasnít unusual for pastors to feel stressed and overwhelmed at times. But thisÖthis explained so many things.

Dean stumbled onto the downloaded images on Davidís computer quite by accident. David was busy making hospital visits that morning when Deanís computer had crashed. Heíd called a technician, but in the meantime, he had decided to use Davidís computer to upload the quarterly financial statement onto discs for the board members in preparation for the meeting scheduled in a week.

The only thing that kept playing through his mind was the scripture ďbe sure your sins will find you out.Ē* Those words brought no comfort to him.
How could David do this? And on the church computer! The more Dean investigated, the worse it became. Some things dated as far back as a year ago. Did David honestly think this would never be discovered?
Tears came to Deanís eyes as he dropped his head onto his cupped hands. He prayed, and wept, then prayed some more.

Finally, an hour later, he stood to his feet. There was only one thing to do. If he truly loved his brother, he would do what was best for him. He would confront David - no lying, no excuses, no covering this thing up. The leadership of their denomination would have to be brought in and decisions made.

Dean thought of a story in the Old Testament. When God had asked Cain where his brother, Abel, was, Cain had responded , ďI donít know. Am I my brotherís keeper?Ē*

Perhaps Dean wasnít Davidís keeper, but he was his brotherís brother. He was family. Dean loved his brother, and because of this love, he would do the right thing even if David didnít understand, even if he was angry.

Numbers 32:23 NIV *
Genesis 4:9 NIV *

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Theresa Santy 12/02/11
Your opening paragraph was fantastic!

One suggestion I'd like to make is to make (for you know, the next time you write a 750 word story with two or more characters) would be to make the character names more dissimilar. I realize they are brothers, and--twins if I remember correctly--however, the names were so similar, I had to struggle to remember which was which.

Otherwise, I enjoyed the story, the message, and your application of the theme.
Theresa Santy 12/02/11
Yikes, I wish I could edit the above comment. Pardon my sloppy writing.
Nancy Bucca12/02/11
Wow, what a powerful story. It's one of those that keeps you on edge, wanting to know what happens next. Great message at the end.
Danielle King 12/04/11
I was on edge too waiting to discover what David had downloaded, but I can work it out. Powerful message, well written and on topic. Well done!
C D Swanson 12/07/11
Great job. I enjoyed this well written piece. Thanks. God Bless~
Martha Black12/07/11
It hurts to hurt for one you love. It really hurts if you have to do something about it that will not make you popular. Good job!
Edmond Ng 12/15/11
A very clear message within your writings. A necessary move that must be brought out to light if we love our brother or sister in the Lord. Cyber temptation is always a problem, and we certainly need to always pray and intercede for God's protection. A very well written piece that gives much food for thought, and challenge to pray especially for those who are serving and leading.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 12/16/11
This is great. I have tears in my eyes. You did a great job of pulling me into the story. Congratulations for ranking 8th in your level and 19th overall!