The Official Writing Challenge
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Oh, I like this one a lot. I really like the images you paint and the rich words you use to to paint them.
For a bit of red ink: I think the first three stanzas feel a little disconnected from the last three. Is there a way you can tie the ending back to the beginning?
Great job! I really like the creativity you put into this!
I really like this. Poetry isn't my favorite genre, but every once in a while I come across a piece that really speaks to me. You did that with this unique perspective on the topic.
12/11/11
This was really good! I was absorbed in the words and meaning from the beginning to the end of this great entry. Thanks. God Bless~
Congratulations for ranking 8th in your level and 16th overall!