The Official Writing Challenge
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11/17/11
Good job with this. Nicely written...I enjoyed it. Thank you. God Bless~
I really liked how you broke down The Lord's Prayer line by line. This is creative and fresh. I think many of us will be able to relate to the MC.

You did kind of cover the topic, but it almost felt like an afterthought to me. I think you have a powerful message here and making it fit the topic might have weakened it a bit.

However, I personally have really struggled with these computer topics and I'm impressed that you tackled it and told the message you felt God was telling you to share. Nicely done.
11/18/11
Interesting and creative way to tackle the topic. Enjoyed this.
11/19/11
Ouch! I never quite thought of the unfocused meandering I call prayer as spamming God! I like the way the prayer begins to come into focus toward the end for the supplicant. (By the time I get to the "bread" I either break for a snack or fall asleep.)
A gentle message on perseverence (and the patience of our God). Good take on the topic.