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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Blog (10/20/11)

TITLE: Is anybody out there?
By T. F. Chezum
10/25/11


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Why bother? Nobody cares.
October 20, 2011 8:02 pm


So here I am again Ö alone.

I donít know why I even write here anymore. Nobody cares. If I were to disappear forever nobody would even miss me. Iím tired of trying. I donít care anymore Ö But who cares.

~LL~

Re: Why bother? Nobody cares.
October 20, 2011 8:04 pm


I care.



I give up
October 23, 2011 6:51 pm


I say I would disappear and nobody answered. Nobody tried to cheer me up or tell me that I matter.

Iím so angry. My best friend Phoebe writes that her pet turtle isnít swimming like usual and she gets like over 100 hits with 35 replies telling her how sad it was and that they were giving her hugs and stuff. Itís just a freakin turtle. My life is going down the toilet and nobody says a thing.

~LL~

Re: I give up
October 23, 2011 6:52 pm


I answered

Re: I give up
October 23, 2011 8:25 pm


If I answer will you stop whining about your pathetic little problems?

Danger Dan

Re: Re: I give up
October 24, 2011 3:14 am


Mind your own business Dan. I donít have pathetic little problems. My mom has blown my college money on drugs and my dad blew his brains out last year because he couldnít deal with his loser family. I just want to go away. I feel so guilty.

~LL~

Re: Re: Re: I give up
October 24, 2011 3:16 am


Itís not your fault



Nobody gets it.
October 27, 2011 1:17 am


So my art teacher gives me an F on my project because my stupid mom drops a cigarette and singes the edge of the page and dumps ashes on it the night before it was due. I tried to explain but she just said she was disappointed because she knows I can do better work. I go home and show my mom and she yells at me like itís my fault. She said if I blew my scholarship to State that she would kick me out.

I have nowhere to go and nobody gets it.

~LL~

Re: Nobody gets it.
October 27, 2011 1:20 am


I understand.

Re: Nobody gets it.
October 27, 2011 8:26 am


So maybe you can become a waitress like your loser mother and earn a little extra cash in the store room with the boss.

Danger Dan

Re: Re: Nobody gets it.
October 27, 2011 4:43 pm


Shut up Dan!

~LL~



Is anybody out there?
October 31, 2011 7:14 pm


I just overheard my mom arguing with the landlord. He said if she doesnít pay the rent by Friday heís going to evict us.

Where will we go? There isnít anybody who cares about us. About me.

No matter how hard I try things just keep getting worse. Nobody even wants to help us. Is anybody out there?

~LL~

Re: Is anybody out there?
October 31, 2011 7:15 pm


Iím here, Laurie.

Re: Re: Is anybody out there?
October 31, 2011 9:37 pm


How do you know who I am?

Re: Re: Re: Is anybody out there?
October 31, 2011 9:39 pm


I know a lot more about you than you can imagine

Re: Re: Re: Re: Is anybody out there?
October 31, 2011 9:51 pm


Do I know you?

Re: Re: Re: Re: Is anybody out there?
October 31, 2011 9:53 pm


You used to sing to me a long time ago, when you were a child. No matter how sad you felt you would stand and sing in your prettiest voice. It made me happy.

Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Is anybody out there?
October 31, 2011 10:07 pm


So youíre disappointed in me, too?

Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Is anybody out there?
October 31, 2011 10:07 pm


No. I am saddened that any child should have to endure what youíve endured. But no matter how hopeless things seem, no matter how trapped you feel I will be there for you.

Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Is anybody out there?
October 31, 2011 10:16 pm


Who are you?

Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Is anybody out there?
October 31, 2011 10:17 pm


God.


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Rachel Phelps11/04/11
This is lovely in its simple format, and powerful in its message. How often do we ignore the one "commenter" we should turn to? Your pacing and craft are excellent. Well done!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 11/06/11
This brought tears to my eyes. I really liked how you showed how mean comments like Dan can break someone's spirit but God will carry us when we can't bear to walk.
Linda Goergen11/07/11
So simple but yet so powerful...contrasting God's words with Dan's certainly shows the world's answers versus God's. Well done.
CD (Camille) Swanson 11/09/11
This was a brilliant entry. What a contrast of characters...and then the quintessential Being- God is there to pull it all together. Amazing job. I love it. God Bless~
Noel Mitaxa 11/11/11
You built this beautifully through a few replies as you dew us to that still small voice that corrodes our fears and builds hope on the inside. Very well done.
Beth LaBuff 11/14/11
Chilling, with a powerful message. Excellent creativity.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 11/15/11
Ahh Tim I've missed seeing your stories. You are so talented. I really liked this and think it will be at the top. BTW I always notice and care when you don't show up for a spell. You're my favorite bus dude! Hugs
Melanie Kerr 11/16/11
This is really good. You gently unwrapped bits of the story and Dan's cruel responses - but God came through in the end.