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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Blog (10/20/11)

TITLE: TimBob's Blah-Blah-Blah Log
By Tim Pickl


Be Respectful

I am writin’ this ‘cause our English teacher wrote in big letters on the main screen at school:


Our teacher—big bad Billy Joe Wyatt—stood up at his desk an’ pointed at the screen. “That’s your assignment during the Teacher’s Convention break this week. I want you blog something. The topic for your blog is wide open; just remember to stay focused and keep it brief, because you want to keep your reader’s attention, and attract more readers to your blog. That’s it for today. Have a safe break!”

On the school bus, I was thinkin’ about what I should write about all the way home. Kids were runnin’ their mouths, talkin’ all loud around me, excited for the long weekend. I guess I was a wee bit worried, ‘cause I’m not a writer at heart, an’ I was clueless what to write about. “What is a blog?” I asked myself, an’ pondered it for a few moments.

Then I overheard a girl nearby say to another girl, “Blah-blah-blah, that’s all math is to me. Blah-blah-blah!”

“That’s it!” I said to myself. I’ll name my school blog, blah-loggin’...

So, here it goes. This is TimBob’s Blah-Blah-Blah Log, a.k.a TimBob’s Blog.

The whole time I was growin’ up, Maw and Paw taught me to be respectful. Be respectful to adults; be respectful to those in authority, like police officers, teachers—even be respectful to the grocery store owner, who by the way, helped me get a job baggin’ groceries, when I just a little bugger.

I’m still workin’ there, thank the Lord, ‘cause most of my friends are unemployed.

Anywho, one day in the middle of the summer I was playin’ at the park with my friend Jimmy an’ there was a man sleepin’ on a bench nearby. The man didn’t look too good. He was all smelly an’ had long greasy silver and black hair and a beard to match. Jimmy wanted to wake him up. I tried to stop him.

“Jimmy, don’t go messin’ with him—leave that man alone.”

“Nahhh, he ain’t gonna do nothin’. Watch!”

So, Jimmy went over an’ poked the man in the ribs. “Time to get up; time to get up for school!”

The poor feller grumbled a little. Jimmy did it again. This time the smelly man roared an’ stood up as if to chase Jimmy. Jimmy was a big chicken, an’ ran like a banshee all the way home.

I jus’ stood there, in shock.

“Whatcha still doin’ here? Git… git away from me, now!”

Somethin’ deep inside told me I should stay. I jus’ looked at him an’ curiously cocked my head. “What’s yer name?”

The man wouldn’t look me in the eye. “Mah name is Sammy.”

“My name is TimBob.” I reached out my hand but he didn’t shake it. “I live real close to here.”

“Well, me too.”

“So, you live down the street, or…?”

“I live here… Right here on this ol’ bench.”

That news made me think. “Are ya hungry?”

“I reckon I am… Yeah, I’m very hungry.”

The more respect I showed Sammy, the more he opened up to me.

“Here Mr. Sammy, please take this.” I offered him my lunch.

“What? Oh, no, son, I couldn’t take yer food, now. Your Momma prob’ly made that special jus’ fer you.”

“Oh, no sir, I insist. I don’t need it all that much. Go ahead.”

“Thank you.”

Sammy wolfed that food down like he hadn’t eaten in about a week. As he ate, I heard two birds singin’ to each other nearby.

“Mr. Sammy, sir, can I visit you again tomorra?”

“Well, I ain’t goin’ nowhere… haha… sure, stop on by.”

For the next few weeks, I visited my new friend Mr. Sammy almost every day. I gave him food an’ we talked about everythin’ from baseball to church. Even Jimmy came with me after awhile an’ we all became friends.

Finally one Saturday I got the nerve to ask, “Mr. Sammy, sir?”

“What’s up?”

“We would love it if you came out to church with us as our special guest.”

“Yeah, it’d be fun!” Jimmy joined in.

“Well, I dunno ‘bout all that. I ain’t quite dressed fer it, an’ all.”

“Awww…..come on. My Paw said he will give ya some more clothes.”

Mr. Sammy thought for a minute. “Okay, why not?”

The next day was a glorious Sunday when Mr. Sammy was baptized.

More on that in my next Blah-Blah-Blah Log.

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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 11/03/11
I enjoyed this immensely. You did a great job pulling me into the story. The idea of making it an assignment. is quite creative.

I noticed little errors like missing words and quotes. A critique group would help with that. I also noticed that though the dialog was a bit rugged, the descriptions in between the quotes were well-written and correct. My only question would be if he spoke in that slang way, would his descriptions be so good?
This is a dilemma because if you stayed in character it might be difficult to read. I don't really have an answer but more am just sharing my musings.

Overall, I think you did a fantastic job. It was a refreshing read and a great example of how adults can learn from kids.
Allison Egley 11/05/11
I really like this.

The end seemed a bit rushed to me... I would have liked to see a few of the details in the beginning taken out and then the a bit more at the end.

I loved the name of the blog. :)
Colin Swann11/08/11
I enjoyed your story. I'm not an expert commenter but I think Shann's advice about things would be helpful. Keep writing!
Theresa Santy 11/08/11
TimBob may have thought he was blah, blah, blahing, but I believe he benefited from his own blogging...

Cute story. Loved the message.
C D Swanson 11/09/11
I liked this story. Good message and fun to read. Thanks. God Bless~
Nancy Bucca11/13/11
This is a great story with a lot of realism in it. I like that idea of the "blah blah blah log." Great job!
Edmond Ng 11/13/11
An enjoyable piece demonstrating the right approach to evangelism. Reaching people for Christ is not so much about telling them than showing in kind by first meeting their needs. A powerful message in a story. Excellent job!
Randy Foncree11/15/11
This is a great piece...I enjoyed the read...God bless you and thanks for sharing it...