The Official Writing Challenge
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09/17/11
I loved this story! Great job!
God bless
09/18/11
I thoroughly enjoyed this dramatization of the angelsí conversation, it was so well written and realistic! And had the perfect ending! Great job!
09/18/11
Fantastic dialogue and what a wonderful conversation. Lots of truth conveyed in a fun way. Great job!
09/18/11
Despite the way we often unwisely use it, the concept that God goes to such lengths to protect our free will is awesome.

The extra words in Neriah's explanation, in my opinion, slowed the flow of the narrative. "Powerful" implies He can do anything.

"So what you're telling me is..." I would consider rephrasing this to eliminate "is."

I'm not sure about the angels, but when I have unanswered questions I try to "lay it all at the Master's feet." Thank you for making that point.

09/19/11
Very nice dialogue. Good job.
On topic and a fun read. Well done.