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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Persuasion (not about the book) (09/01/11)

TITLE: The List
By Linda Goergen
09/04/11


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The persuasion
of the demon voice
in her head
screaming
her worthlessness
her need to try
and erase herself
from existence
to slit her wrists and
bleed away
her fifteen years of pain
put her on the list

Next on the list
the young man
who had been celebrating
turning nineteen
may not walk again
his mangled car
like his mangled legs
messaged their amazement
he was even still alive
laying there
far from being
the invincible dude
he thought he was
when the persuasion
of the party group
led him to drink
just a few more

A prostitute
not young Ė far from old
but old enough
to have known better
than to let the persuasion
of her so called friend
put her on the streets
with fast cash promises
like the lies
and the tricks
devouring her spirit
without doubt
needed to be on the list
as she dealt
with the news
of now having AIDS

A list priority
was the middle aged man
with bullet wound
that barely missed his heart
the gun fired
by his formerly loving wife
that was crying out
WHY - WHY - WHY
he let the persuasion
of lust
and the woman at work
lure him
into the affair
that ended him here
now agonizing in pain
even more
from the result of his actions
than his wound

It seemed important too
for the list
to include
the boy
barely turned thirteen
brought in screaming
everything - everywhere
was bug covered
vile and infested
his mindís hallucination
thanks to the persuasion
of his brotherís junkie friend
who assured him
drugs
were merely fun

Clutching the list
the Hospital Chaplain
feels weary
even before he begins
another day of witnessing
needless pain and suffering
the burden of his heart
drives him to his knees
seeking
and asking the Holy Spirit
to go before him
convicting and persuading
these so in need
of Godís love and truth
he weeps
list in hand
and prays for wisdom
and words to convince
the sad souls
that God - not the world
holds the answers
then he arises
and takes hold
of his well worn
sword of the spirit
and sets out one more day
with one more list
to combat
sinís persuasion


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CD Swanson 09/09/11
Powerfully written, and nicely done! I loved it. God Bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 09/10/11
Wow! This really touched my heart. There is so much pain in the world You did an outstanding job worth this.
Tom Parsons 09/10/11
Good use of the theme word. Very powerful poem.
Danielle King 09/13/11
I like this poem a lot.

It's good to face up to real life issues instead of brushing them under the carpet and acting as if life's good for everybody.

The people you've written about exist all around us and as Christians we should be identifying their needs and doing what we can to help physically, but more importantly to point them in the direction of God.

Excellent job!
Theresa Santy 09/13/11
Gripping, powerful, and deeply heart-wrenching. You captured me with the first few words (actually, you caught me with the title) and held me until the end.

Clap! Clap! Clap!

Bravo!

Loved it.
Bryan Ridenour09/14/11
Powerfully written and a reminder that all around us people are hurting. Well done.
Patricia Protzman09/14/11
Great job with the theme and the topic. Very powerfully written.
Noel Mitaxa 09/14/11
Very powerfully told, with an economy of description. It's not just a list - it's people! You brought that truth out very clearly.
Patricia Protzman09/15/11
Congratulations on your win. I knew this would be a winner. God Bless.
CD Swanson 09/15/11
Congratulations on your well first place win! Nice job...God Bless~
Edmond Ng 09/15/11
Congratulations!
Noel Mitaxa 09/15/11
Congratulations on your well-deserved first placing.
Fiona Stevenson09/15/11
Congratulations! Well worked out, well written, and just too true. God bless you.
Sharon Eastman09/15/11
Great poem, and one I could really understand and relate to. Congratulations on your EC place.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 09/15/11
Congratulations on your EC now that you've received 3 EC you get to move to Masters!
Karen Pourbabaee 09/15/11
Intense well written piece...congratulations on your win and EC placing!
Margaret Kearley 09/16/11
Heartbreaking truth of desperation, so needing the Physician's touch. Written so very very well. Congrats on your placing.
stanley Bednarz 09/16/11
I loved how you spun the poem as if the chaplain felt the spiraling trend and it drew him to his knees. Congratualtion on a well deserved win.
Stan
Irene Patterson 09/17/11
Your entry was so close to reality for so many that it was almost painful to read.

Concise, moving, inspiring.

Wonderful!
Danielle King 09/18/11
Congratulations Linda on your placing 1st and also EC. This was an excellent piece of work. Very well done!
Carol Penhorwood 09/19/11
So powerfully written describing not only the pain all around, but the burden carried by those who truly care. Very deserving of 1st place!