The Official Writing Challenge
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09/09/11
Nicely done, good ending. I liked it. God Bless~
09/09/11
Interesting story. I wonder what will happen in your MC's future? The fact that I'm wondering tells me this was well done. :)
09/09/11
Purse-sueded – ha – that is cute and clever, just like your story that shows several examples of persuasion. And the last one, being persuaded for Christ is the perfect happy ending! Enjoyed!
09/10/11
The play on words was great. It made me giggle. Usually I'd say try not to have such a long paragraph, but it worked perfectly setting that hectic pace.

When you switched topics so aprubtly after the infomercial I was taken abit off guard. I understand that was due to the word count limit. Perhaps you could have cut the "hawking" a bit more so that you could've transitioned more.

Overall, it was a clever story, a great testimony and well-written. You did a nice job with making the characters feel real.
09/12/11
By the time I got here all the good comments were taken. But I agree with the comments above. Good job.
09/13/11
Great title and well written. Good job!
09/15/11
Congratulations for ranking 7th in level 3!