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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Persuasion (not about the book) (09/01/11)

TITLE: Purse Sueded
By Tim Pickl
09/03/11


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“Okay ladies—and gentlemen—as promised in the last hour, this is our final showing today for Purse Sueded. There is no other handbag like it on the planet. It is so "suede-ably"—is that a word?--soft, so delightfully durable, so wonderfully designed, you will use it in every season. The price, phone number and website address are on your screen. I encourage you to call now or log on to our website—the supplies are going fast! It looks like we’ve only got about 4 minutes remaining, but hurry and call or log on now. What I like about Purse Sueded is how the designers have added a complete set of liners. The liner is zipped into the interior; and if the liner gets dirty or you just get tired of the look, you can unzip it and voila! It comes right out…see, like this… I really love the zebra look, but that’s just me. The liner is totally wash machine safe. Also, just for today in this last showing, remember Purse Sueded comes with 3 bottles of Purse Sueded WP (Weather Protection). Just spray it on and after just 20 minutes to let it dry, the rain and snow just beads right off your new hand bag. And, the cool thing is those 3 bottles will last for about 3 years… Okay, I’m being told by our Producer that Purse Sueded has SOLD OUT. Thank you everybody so much for getting Purse Sueded—I know you will love this handbag; and if you are giving one as a gift, your spouse will absolutely love it. Thanks again!”

“All right everyone, we’ve gone to the network promo,” Jim the director announced.

“Whew! I need a break—I don’t know why, but I was nervous. Probably because it was the last show for Purse Sueded—the pressure was on. I know I was talking too fast again.” Annie sat down on the couch located behind the cameras, specifically set up for break times for the on air personnel. She sipped on a large Starbucks coffee, which was now beginning to get cold.

“Want me to microwave that for you?” Jim gently asked, smiling.

“Oh, sure…that’d be nice. I’m tired.”

Jim walked over and placed the cup into the microwave. “Have you thought about— ”

“Have I thought about what we were talking about during lunch yesterday?”

“Yes, have you?”

“Jim, I can’t stop thinking about it. In fact, I had a hard time sleeping last night, which may explain why I’ve been drinking so much coffee today.”

Jim handed the cup back, now steaming.

“Thank you.” Annie sipped it again. “Ohh, so much better. You guys have the air conditioning set way too low in here.”

“We want you to stay awake.”

“Very funny. But seriously, though… when you told me your story about how you grew up, and how mean and awful your step dad was toward you; and then how when you got bigger, you punched him in the face and ran away. I just couldn’t get over the fact that you were just a teenager, homeless... out there in the streets. How did you live through all of that?”

“I slept in places that most people couldn’t begin to believe. Being homeless isn’t what I was used to, but I did what one must do with or without family support, because at that stage in my life there wasn’t much they could do to help me.”

“Who helped you?”

“Help for the homeless can come from many walks of life: construction, hospitals and offices; but my help finally came from a kid I knew from school. He convinced his parents to take me in.”

“And those people took you to church?”

“Yeah, well at first I did not want to go. But the more I heard from my friend how awesome it was, the more persuaded I became.”

“There’s that word.”

“What word?”

Persuaded. It was going through my head all night. I think that’s what’s happened to me; I’m persuaded that you are absolutely right. I want to go to church with you and your kids on Sunday. I need to be there.”

“You are most delightfully and wonderfully welcome.” Paul laughed. “You are always welcome. I’ll pick you up: I’ll text you with the details. Annie, this is so awesome—God has answered my prayers.”

“I’ve been praying a lot lately, too… It’s ironic, isn’t it? After hawking Purse Sueded for the last 2 hours?”


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CD Swanson 09/09/11
Nicely done, good ending. I liked it. God Bless~
marcella franseen 09/09/11
Interesting story. I wonder what will happen in your MC's future? The fact that I'm wondering tells me this was well done. :)
Linda Goergen09/09/11
Purse-sueded – ha – that is cute and clever, just like your story that shows several examples of persuasion. And the last one, being persuaded for Christ is the perfect happy ending! Enjoyed!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 09/10/11
The play on words was great. It made me giggle. Usually I'd say try not to have such a long paragraph, but it worked perfectly setting that hectic pace.

When you switched topics so aprubtly after the infomercial I was taken abit off guard. I understand that was due to the word count limit. Perhaps you could have cut the "hawking" a bit more so that you could've transitioned more.

Overall, it was a clever story, a great testimony and well-written. You did a nice job with making the characters feel real.
Tom Parsons 09/12/11
By the time I got here all the good comments were taken. But I agree with the comments above. Good job.
Bryan Ridenour09/13/11
Great title and well written. Good job!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 09/15/11
Congratulations for ranking 7th in level 3!