The Official Writing Challenge
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09/09/11
Nicely done, good ending. I liked it. God Bless~
Interesting story. I wonder what will happen in your MC's future? The fact that I'm wondering tells me this was well done. :)
09/09/11
Purse-sueded – ha – that is cute and clever, just like your story that shows several examples of persuasion. And the last one, being persuaded for Christ is the perfect happy ending! Enjoyed!
The play on words was great. It made me giggle. Usually I'd say try not to have such a long paragraph, but it worked perfectly setting that hectic pace.

When you switched topics so aprubtly after the infomercial I was taken abit off guard. I understand that was due to the word count limit. Perhaps you could have cut the "hawking" a bit more so that you could've transitioned more.

Overall, it was a clever story, a great testimony and well-written. You did a nice job with making the characters feel real.
09/12/11
By the time I got here all the good comments were taken. But I agree with the comments above. Good job.
Great title and well written. Good job!
Congratulations for ranking 7th in level 3!