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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Great Expectations (not about the book) (08/25/11)

TITLE: The Cost of Discontentment
By Charla Diehl
08/30/11


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In the Garden of Eden if I’d been around
I’d have tackled dear Eve to the velvety ground
Before being coerced by the serpent so vile
Which cost her and Adam their gifted life style.

I would’ve begged and pleaded, “Don’t listen to him—
He’s holding a grudge from egotistical sin.
God dismissed the angel with arrogant pride
Disgraced and discharged—Eve, walk by God’s side.”

Maybe curious eyes would’ve widened right then
And clarity and truth would’ve saved her from sin.
The infamous fruit—untouched—still whole—
But no, the tempter put the squeeze on her soul.

If all the “if onlys” on life’s fading pages
Could undo the messes man caused through the ages--
If love were the constant we grasped with both hands
We’d silence all bombing in all foreign lands.

How wondrous and awesome our world could’ve been
If Eve had been strong and not given in,
Her great expectations were driven by greed—
Discontentment grows from a poisonous seed.


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Kellie Henningsen09/02/11
The rhythm and rhyme in this poem are well done! Very enjoyable to read. The second line cracked me up and I was hooked from there on out.
Lori Othouse 09/03/11
"If all the “if onlys” on life’s fading pages
Could undo the messes man caused through the ages--" Love those lines - very powerful. Really makes you think about the consequences of our actions. Nice!
Linda Goergen09/06/11
Ahhhh, but if Eve didn't do it, someone else along the line would have! :) Loved this light-hearted poem that carries a powerful message. Good job!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 09/08/11
Congratulations for placing 10th in Masters and 14th overall!