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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: The Comedy of Errors (not about the play) (08/18/11)

TITLE: An Ode - Descent of a Man
By Helen Curtis
08/25/11


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Monday.
A choice to make, a path to take:
To play the game or walk away?
It's just some fun, no harm can come.
I follow,
Uncertain,
Hesitant.

Tuesday.
The choice I made, my path did trade:
We played the game, then ran away.
We tricked the bum, we fooled him good!
I smirk,
More certain,
Less hesitant.

Wednesday.
The choice is mine, I raise my stein:
This game tonight? Oh yes, let's play!
Get in your cars, the race is on!
I focus,
Confident,
Psyched.

Thursday.
An easy choice, the path is clear,
I long to play a game tonight.
She's lookin' hot, don't wait for me!
I stalk,
Arrogant,
Excited.

Friday.
There is no choice, I've but one path,
It's just for pleasure now I live.
You guys are weak; come on, be men!
I lead,
Defiant,
Brazen.

Saturday.
They make the choice, arrest my path.
The cell is cold, as are their eyes.
Oh stupid man, your "fun" mistakes
have left you,
Destroyed,
Abandoned.


Sunday.
One final choice: two paths, which way?
I cannot do this on my own.
Here, take my hand, I'll lead you on.
I fall,
Humbled,
Broken.


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Rachel Phelps08/25/11
What a great structure for this story! I was a little lost because of the lack of detail, but on a second reading, I think I like the non-specificity. Awesome creativity!
Kelvin Fowler08/25/11
Yeah I had to read it twice as well, but I liked it. It got me thinking, loved the writing style as well.
Leslie Schonfeld08/26/11
Loved this! It was my favorite; a weeks jouney that really is a snapshot of life.
Noel Mitaxa 08/26/11
Lots of errors, but I'm afraid I missed the comedy. However it's still a well-crafted piece.
Sarah Elisabeth 08/26/11
Tight writing, great format! What a full circle. Thanks for ending with the hope.
Colin Swann08/27/11
I almost got the story you're portraying here, but got lost as I thought it could be two stories rolled into one - and then I may have got it all wrong. Certainly got me thinking. Thanks!
Danielle King 08/29/11
Well structured,great message,but not sure how well it fits the topic being a serious thought provoking piece. However very well done!
Linda Goergen08/31/11
Well written and thought provoking but I too felt it lacked the comedy that would have made it more fit the challenge.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 09/07/11
Congratulations for ranking 8th in level 3!