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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: The Comedy of Errors (not about the play) (08/18/11)

TITLE: Not On Me Shift
By Kelvin Fowler
08/24/11


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This little frightened traveller
venturing out by himself
across the channel
to big Pastor's Conference

Asked a nice friend
if I could use his computer
to book an airline ticket
easyJet.com to Amsterdam

Friend says to Kiwi
“easyJet, you'll be flying from Prestwick”
Kiwi went to the train-station to purchase ticket
said “easyJet, Prestwick, discount please”

Went home, packed my bags
next day, excited and scared
jumped on that train
Prestwick International Airport bound

Nothing is more peaceful
or romantic
than train travel
clickety-clack clickety-clack

Disembarked at Prestwick's only terminal
carried my duffel bag
across the air-bridge, down the escalators
to check-in

Put my bag on the scales
presented my passport
presented my ticket
presented myself

Airline host looked a little confused
looked at me
looked at my ticket
and stated “Wrong airport Sir”

Heart started pumping
blood drained from my face
“What?”, I said
“Sir you need Glasgow International”

I ran out of check-in
climbed the stairs and sprinted across the air-bridge
lumbering my tired duffel bag,
I arrived back at the train station

Sweating and flustered
I checked the time table
just missed my return train:
“Oh God what did I do?”

Not knowing what else could be done
I begged God for another train
and started repenting
repenting of everything

Thirty minutes later
the express train arrived
first stop
Paisley for Glasgow International Airport

Nothing more frustrating
than repenting your way
on an unnecessary trip
clickety-clack clickety-clack

Jumped from train to taxi
“Driver, airport quick, I'm missing my train”
His reply was “ye no gonnae miss ye plane,
och nae Pal, not on me shift”

It was one hour before my flight arrived
when I sprinted in the door
threw my bags on the scales
and threw my passport and ticket on the desk

Smiling face behind the counter
informed me that boarding had closed
I splurted “But the plane hasn't left”
she replied “Go to information for another flight”

Next flight, same time, next day
I sulked my way home
skulked back into Bible college
and hid in my embarrassment

They should have never
let me travel without my wife
and in Amsterdam
I am forever known as

“The one who missed his plane”.


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Camille (C D) Swanson 08/25/11
Hahahahaha...Good Job! God Bless~
Rachel Phelps08/25/11
Great story for this topic. Fun voice, too!
Cheryl von Drehle08/26/11
Love the story, and especially the conclusion.This might work better as a story rather than a poem.
Leslie Schonfeld08/26/11
Brought a smile to my face. Especially repenting, repenting of everything really captured our typical response.
Noel Mitaxa 08/26/11
Great energy in a casserole of chaos. Nothing is as plane as it looks. I loved this one Kelvin. Well done.
Sarah Elisabeth 08/26/11
lol, loved the repenting part as well, and about the wife. Great work!
Danielle King 08/27/11
Great voice and I was panicking with you to catch that flight. Well done!
Colin Swann08/27/11
You had me gripped all the way. Oh, I do hate airports and flying - give me sailing any day. Thanks for a great write!
Tom Parsons 08/29/11
Few things suggest a comedy of errors more than a mixture of rail and plane travel. I agree with those who liked the "repenting" and the "travel without my wife" comments.

I agree that a narratve form might have added to the story, but I will not deny the poetry made me smile.
Leola Ogle 08/29/11
Delightful! Made me smile all the way through! God bless!
Kathleen Langridge08/30/11
Loved the rhythm. I felt at ease with this as poetry and identified with the character in the chaos of travel. The reality of repent, repent, repent was so 'spot on.'
Thanks for a moment of lightness as I face a trip across the world in Sept.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 09/07/11
Congratulations for ranking 7th in level 3!