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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: The Comedy of Errors (not about the play) (08/18/11)

TITLE: Date Night
By Leslie Schonfeld
08/24/11


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Nervously, I dressed for our big evening out. A five star restaurant he said. Excitement pumped through my veins. In my family the local restaurant was as fancy as we got. He arrived, and whisked me away to our dream date.

Overwhelmed by the menu, I asked for suggestions. “Duck.” He said, “You would love the succulent meat.”

The duck arrived; the waitress removed the domed lid. Sitting before me was an entire roasted bird. The smell was odd but I was ready for the new experience. A tiny fork accompanied my dish. Picking it up I delicately poked at the skin. Nothing happened. With a little more force I tried to pierce the delectable dish. I didn’t even dent it. Finally, grabbing the dinner fork like a spear I stabbed. Crumbling before me, my duck disintegrated. The foul fowl was inedible. Watching my date eat his dinner, I waited for my meal replacement.

Embarrassed, he escorted me out of the restaurant; he had planned another surprise. He was determined to resurrect this date. We drove to a little park laced with beautiful gardens. It was one of his favorite places. Nestled in among the flowers was an open air stone fireplace. We cuddled before a roaring fire. Relaxing, I sighed, maybe this would be a lovely evening after all. One raindrop hit my head, maybe it would stop. Storm clouds opened, the rain pelted us as we ran for the car.

Finding shelter, at least we were together. As long as it was just the two of us the evening wasn’t a complete lost. Soaking wet, we had to laugh. What a site we were. Gazing at the drowning embers of the fire we tried to make the best of it. Leaning in he kissed me. Sighing, I realized this wasn’t such a bad night. My thoughts were interrupted by a tapping on the window.

“Yes officer?” He said.

“You can’t park here, son. Go on home.” He ordered.

Our ridiculous night had come to a close. Expectations of a romantic evening came to a crashing halt. It wasn’t a total loss, I married him anyway. Anyone who would go through such effort was worth keeping. After 22 years, we still enjoy sharing our tale.


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Camille (C D) Swanson 08/25/11
Awww...So sweet. What an adorable story, God Bless your union always~
Colin Swann08/26/11
What a lovely story - really enjoyed this. God Bless you!
Cathryn Hasek08/26/11
It seems one can write books about dates gone wrong...or maybe do a t.v. show about it! Glad your story had a happy ending, however, as it doesn't always turn out well!

I like your description of the duck "deflating." Good word choice!
Noel Mitaxa 08/26/11
I think I might have "ducked" for cover, but this was a great read. Well done.
Sarah Elisabeth 08/26/11
Aw, and oops. I would say these types of events are important before marriage. Really helps you get a know the person when you're in one fix after the other!
Laury Hubrich 08/26/11
Awwww...what a sweet love story. It could only get better from there, I suppose, yes? :)
Leola Ogle 08/26/11
I loved the story, an almost Cinderella story. Great writing and glad the couple is happily married! How sweet! God bless!
Kelvin Fowler08/29/11
Sweet story, cute read, well done.