The Official Writing Challenge
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08/27/11
Oh, I like this. You've got the dialect down pat. :)

I would have revealed that the MC was a girl a little sooner. I suppose the fact that she was sharing a bed with her sister should have given me a clue, but I didn't know for sure until her name was mentioned.

Good job. I like how this one was serious. It was a nice change of pace. :)
I was drawn in immediately to this story. Excellent job with the dialogue. Very well written.
I really enjoyed this story. You balanced the comedy and the tragedy brilliantly. My dad used to tip outhouses. I loved hearing his tales of trouble-making. I've missed reading your stories. You do a great job.