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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: The Comedy of Errors (not about the play) (08/18/11)

TITLE: Colossal mistake
By vincent lyons


My Grandpa, though quite slightly built is fit and full of ‘go’
Is proud of his condition and is quick to let you know
He hasn’t reached his ‘use by’ date and won’t for some years yet
But on the odd occasion gusto causes him regret.

There’s one occurrence I recall forever left its mark
On Grandpa and the neighbourhood and the décor of the park,
Mistake of giant magnitude occasioned by his zeal,
He bit off more than he could chew—his pride took time to heal!

Meg the neighbour has a canine, known as Eiderdown,
Colossus of a dog, must almost weigh two hundred pounds;
Her breed being somewhat vague between a mongrel and a mutt,
With two deep set mischievous eyes and coat as black as soot.

Has built-in cat aversion, thinks they must be always chased;
(Looks like she chased one lately by the scratch marks on her face.)
It’s not that she is vicious, just a vagabond of sorts;
She simply finds cat chasing is an entertaining sport.

When Meg went on a trip she asked Grandpa to feed the dog,
And on the odd occasion maybe take her for a jog,
He needed to be careful not to give her too much rope—
If she got a whiff of traction he wouldn’t have a hope!

But Grandpa missed that little bit—mistake he’d long regret—
In gossip of the neigbourhood he’s paying for it yet!
The first day of his tenure he took ‘Eiders’ to the park—
What a docile gentle giant!! She didn’t even bark!!

Grandpa ambled on relaxed, so casual, at ease—
There’s trouble ‘round the corner—trouble Grandpa never sees!
There was a sudden mad explosion—‘Eiders’ spied a cat;
She took off like a charging bull and knocked poor Grandpa flat;

She dragged him through some bushes, then a mud hole and a creek,
Through the neighbours’ roses, down the middle of our street,
Two furrows down the grassy park bore witness to his knees
While ‘Eiders’ was oblivious to Grandpa’s shouts and pleas.

Then everyone came out to see the free amusement show---
First, the cat, then Eiderdown with Grandpa hard in tow---
They hadn’t seen excitement such as this in ages past—
Grandpa the star attraction in such a star-studded cast!!

The cat leaped up a six foot wall to make good his escape---
The chase was done, the dog retired--- poor Grandpa bruised and scraped---
His shirt was torn, his pants were black, his shoes were never found;
Made spectacle before them all by that outlandish hound!!

No more he’ll ever walk that dog--- he’s had his fill of that;
There ends the tale of Eiderdown, of Grandpa, and the cat.
They’re all still in the neighbourhood but each one knows his place
And Grandpa’s learned that slowing down is better done with grace.

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Carol Penhorwood 08/25/11
An amusing tale with great rhyming. I did struggle a bit with some of the rhythm in places, but loved your word choices. Especially laughed at your "use by" date.
Juliette Chamberlain-Bond08/28/11
I absolutely love this humerous poem.
The storyline unfolds in perfect sequence, and is aided by the excellent rhyme scheme.
I laughed all the way through.

I love the playful sence of humour which still allows the actuality of the story to unfold.
Grandpa just may have bitten off a little more that he could chew!

Noel Mitaxa 08/29/11
Great fun here, unless you're Grandpa, with skilful descriptions and a rolling, slightly irregular rhythm. Yet given the chaos in the story the rhythm is well-suited.
C D Swanson 08/30/11
Poor Grandpa! This entry had good imagery throughout...I enjoyed this and could see the whole thing in my mind's eye, quite the picture!
God Bless~
Linda Goergen08/31/11
Oh what a tale in rhyme of grandpa and the dog and the cat chase! Such comical, vivid images, well written. I don't blame grandpa, I'd never walk that dog again either! LOL