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08/12/11
Good story,nice imagery. I saw this story going in a couple of directions, but you pulled it together nicely. God Bless~
08/13/11
This story brought a chill to my spirit, as many children are to this day given in these evil, disgusting marriages. I am glad the parents changed in the end, I feared they might be coming to try and influence her back. The bible warns not to fall for the perverted word of these false prophets...this is a good reminder.
08/16/11
This is an interesting story like the opposite of the prodigal son.

Small editing note:Natures wrath should be nature's wrath.

I have been estranged from my dad since he met a women who isolates him from family and friends. It's like when Mom died the dad I knew died too. Your story reminds me to never give up on him and to pray for both of them. Thank you for that.
08/20/11
Congratulations for ranking 7th in level 3.
08/21/11
Well done Stan. You've brought out a different aspect of the romance of the old west and taken us through some deep grief and shame. Religious manipulation is such a demonic thing however it shows itself, and I admire your MC's depth of forgiveness.