The Official Writing Challenge
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08/13/11
Seriously, Herman flowed nicely. In my imagination they get married and raise a beautiful bunch of kids. Write on.
08/13/11
The proposal was based on the "initial meeting" where she loved his comic style and wit...So I can see where he brought levity into the proposal. I liked it, and I feel he will get the bride when he tells her "in earnest" how much he cares. Nice job! God Bless~
08/15/11
A great story - well written and enjoyable. Hope it works out for him! (I was though a little confused by the introduction of 'Henrietta' in the middle of the story - guess it was in error?)
08/15/11
It stalled me too when Harriet suddenly seemed to become "Henrietta", when talking about the job situation?? Otherwise an interesting story, that although seems lighthearted carries a serious message. I agree with Harriet, there is a time and place for joking and a time when we need to be serious. Enjoyed the read.
08/17/11
Let me say that I think I KNOW you meant Harriet rather than Henrietta. I know full well what it's like to think about several names for characters, settle on one, but have the other one linger in your head. At least, I think I'm right. I loved the easy intimate voice of your MC, it flowed along, giving us sufficient insight into his thoughts. Your title was SO appropriate, just perfect.
08/20/11
Congratulations for placing 9th in Masters and 14th overall.