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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Much Ado about Nothing (not about the play) (07/28/11)

TITLE: Jeremy Angel's First Trip to Earth
By Amica Joy
08/01/11


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“Am I going to visit earth now?” Jeremy Angel asked.

“Yes, it’s your turn.” Raphael said.

“What am I going to do down on earth?” inquired Jeremy Angel who was really nervous about his first trip to earth.

“Wait and see”, said Raphael. “But don’t put your hopes high. Earth is a pit. It’s a horrible place.”

“It cannot be. God created earth!” exclaimed Jeremy Angel. “Earth must be beautiful.”

Raphael shook his head. He was a beautiful bright shining and very powerful angel but now his light looked kind of dim and he had a very sad look on his face.

“Oh – don’t look at me like that,” said Jeremy Angel. If it weren’t impossible for angels to be truly unhappy, I would think you are.”

“No, Jeremy, not unhappy but very sad,” Raphael said, “But come with me. It’s time for your first trip to earth.”

“I knew it”, exclaimed Jeremy Angel. “Earth is a beautiful place! Just look at these majestic mountains and the ocean. Wow!”

“But the people are not”, muttered Raphael.

Jeremy was too absorbed with the beauty of God’s creation to pay attention to Raphael’s comment.

“Come on, Jeremy, we’re going to join this couple for a ride in their car”, said Raphael and both of them silently, and unseen by any humans, slipped onto the back seats of the car that was driving at a high speed on the motorway.

Cindy and her husband Ken were on their way to a friend’s silver wedding anniversary.
“Hey, I’m sure she’s not as pretty as she was. Even her beauty will have faded,” Cindy said.

Ken shrugged his shoulders. “I don’t care”, he thought, “I just hope she’s still a nice person and nice to talk to.”
Cindy went on gossiping about her old friend Leila who had been the most beautiful woman in town, 25 years ago.

“Can’t you just stop?” Ken said.

“What?” exclaimed Cindy in her loud and self-absorbed manner, “You don’t want me to talk about her? You had a crush on her back then, didn’t you?” Cindy laughed out loud.

“O no! I don’t want that kind of talk again!” Ken thought and remained silent, pretending he wasn’t hearing her.
His wife was too loud. And her make-up was enough to do a whole female military brigade over. Layers upon layers, and this lipstick! Grotesque! And her perfume. Too much. Everything about her was just too much.

“What’s wrong, Ken?” inquired Cindy who was totally unaware of the pain she was causing her husband.

“Nothing”, Ken said, “Nothing.”

“Why doesn’t he tell her what he feels?” exclaimed Jeremy Angel.

“Because she’s not listening. She only listens to herself." Raphael replied.

“Where are we now?” inquired Jeremy Angel.

“At an abortion clinic”, Raphael said with an angry and sad tremor in his voice.

“Relax, Miss Hunt, this is just a small medical intervention. It won’t hurt you”, the doctor said.

“I just don’t feel good about this,” the 18-year-old said.

“Don’t worry, it’s nothing. You’ve only been pregnant for two weeks. You have nothing to worry about.” the doctor said, smiling at Miss Hunt reassuringly.

“How can he say it’s nothing?” Jeremy Angel exclaimed. “A baby is growing in her womb!”

“Well – this doctor isn’t protecting life but social standards”, commented Rafael.

“Come, with me, we have to visit one more person.”

Jeremy Angel and Raphael were standing in a huge supermarket.

“There’s our man”, said Raphael, pointing to a man who was steeling stationary.

“But, he’s one of the store’s sales persons”, said Jeremy Angel.

The man was mumbling to himself: “I’m not getting paid properly anyway. They’re so rich. It’s nothing to them – nothing.”

“I need fresh air”, Jeremy Angel said. “I feel sin is slowly strangling me!”

“I told you. Earth is a pit”, Raphael said quietly. The two angels exchanged sad glances.

“Now I know what you mean. They always say it’s nothing. But ‘nothing’ is ruining their lives.” Jeremy Angel said and then he had to weep.

“The sad thing is that if they think they are not committing any sins, they will not repent and then God can’t save them”, Raphael explained. “Jesus cannot forgive ‘nothing'. He can only forgive sin.”

“Mankind really is in deep trouble”, wept Jeremy Angel. “We’re up against ‘nothing’! That’s ridiculous.”

“No, we’re up against the Evil One. “He’s the mastermind behind the ‘nothings’ of this world.”


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Linda Goergen08/05/11
Poor Jeremy Angel – what a disappointing trip! And just think those are only three of endless, countless sins God and the angels witness from earth daily! Compared to Heaven earth is indeed a pit! I think this is almost the opposite of “much ado about nothing” …it is people giving no heed to something important…the sin in their lives! Enjoyed the read!
Noel Mitaxa 08/07/11
A positive challenge expressed in a really imaginative style.
Edmond Ng 08/08/11
An excellent and sad portrayal of what’s wrong with this world. You've hit the nail on the head in delivering the truths of the message about the evil schemes of the devil in deceiving the world to think sin is acceptable, which is definitely NOT. An excellent piece well written!