The Official Writing Challenge
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08/04/11
Poor Anton! Someone needs to remind him that God doesn’t think him a nothing! But I do believe he may have the beginnings of standing up for himself with that last line of not bothering to close the back of his gown! LOL LOL Entertaining read.
08/07/11
Should Anton have been more "patient?" Very descriptive, with a light touch of humour in all the chaos around him.
08/08/11
A story that carries through the mood of the MC very well. Good work.
This is a funny story and it made me giggle. Having been in the hospital so much I could relate to Anton's dilemma.

I'm not sure if the last line was the best one to leave the reader a mental picture of the MC's cheeks flapping in the breeze; but once again I giggled.

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