The Official Writing Challenge
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It was a charming story but it lacked a certain intensity. The dialogue was smooth, maybe too predictable.
07/28/11
I liked this story - a great one to pass along to the grandkids. I thought the dialogue was believable (maybe because you experienced it first hand?) :) Seems like a chapter out of Hardy Boys novel, or Huckleberry Finn?
07/29/11
It was a cute clean story...good for children to read as well. I liked it, fresh and believable in terms of the boys; children always think they can get away with things, and this was a perfect way of showing that a "crime hardly ever goes unpunished" - good job. God Bless~
08/03/11
Tsk tsk, the wrath of grapes! Well written.