The Official Writing Challenge
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07/29/11
Oh, I like this. I loved the repeated line in all the stanzas.
07/30/11
Absolutely loved this one. A Bible story where someone thought it just little sin to steal which was indeed a big one and caused so much defeat.
I hope this does well for you.
07/30/11
I loved your story telling. I anticipated the end and felt the anguish in the realization of throwing away true treasure.
08/01/11
Simple, strong and creative POV on a major setback caused by a 'minor' crime. Well narrated.
08/02/11
Great poetic telling of this Bible story! The repeated line worked well. Excellent job.
08/02/11
Great Bible truth told you in a unique way. Great job!
08/02/11
The rhythm flows, and the recurring refrain blends in so well. Loved the title and the message - not preachy.
You did an excellent job of connecting the sin in the Bible story to our own, making for a powerful message.
08/04/11
A very powerful poem - excellently written. The repetition of the 3rd line really stroikes with strong force. Excellent.
08/04/11
A big round of applause. Well deserved!