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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Crime and Punishment (not about the book) (07/21/11)

TITLE: It's a Crime
By Verna Cole Mitchell
07/26/11


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Outside the little country church
Stood Maudie with her friends,
Old ladies, clucking 'round her like
A gossiping of hens.

“I think it’s just a crime,” she sighed,
“That Kathryn’s in the choir.
The ones who get the punishment
Are those who stand beside her.

She sounds just like an old foghorn
That guides lost ships to shore,
Except her voice is so off-key,
There’s none would seek to moor.

The congregation’s punished, too,
By her discordant voice.
They’d like to see her gone, I’m sure,
Were they to have the choice.”

The ladies nodded their assent,
Four bobbing heads of gray,
There wasn’t one who’d disagree,
With what she’d had to say.

Then round the corner came a lass,
Of maybe six or seven.
“You better change your ways,” said she,
“Or you won’t go to heaven.

For what you said 'bout my grandma,
That seems to me a crime,
And you’ll be punished ‘you know where ’
For all the rest of time.”

She flounced away, and Maudie said,
“The truth is never wrong.
I do not lie; it is a crime
How Kathryn sings a song.”


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Virgil Youngblood 07/28/11
Delightful. Loved the ending.
Loren T. Lowery07/29/11
I could just picture all of this. I'm currently reading "Of Human Bondage" and "The House of Seven Gables" and the characters seem to fit so well with the time and place. Delightful reading, as always!
Eliza Evans 07/29/11
I LOVE this. Wonderful creative take on the topic! I was hoping you would do one of your humorous poems. They make my heart glad. :)
Colin Swann07/30/11
This is lovely, funny and cute. Great piece - loved it!
Carol Penhorwood 07/30/11
Delightful and funny. I bet we all know a few ladies like that (and maybe a few singers)!
Laury Hubrich 08/01/11
Oh boy:) Too cute. Judgmental old ladies. There is just nothing like them.
Noel Mitaxa 08/01/11
Nasty little old ladies, and they got verse and verse as they went....
Catrina Bradley 08/02/11
And that's why I don't sing in the choir. :) Fun!!!
Lillian Rhoades 08/02/11
Original with a light touch.
I love your rhyme with ease style. "Choir - beside her,"
and not one beat out of step!
Delightful!