The Official Writing Challenge
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07/28/11
I liked the whole premise of your story, although it seemed a bit much to develop and resolve in 750 words. It would have been interesting to take the opposite approach and describe your main character's reaction if "justice" had not been accomplished. Several areas where you needed more commas. Loved Vanessa's heart for the residents - you did a great job describing that. Enjoyed reading this. Keep writing, and bless you as you do! :)
08/03/11
I like this - the way Vanessa kept trusting God in the face of humiliation and injustice, the way Jim’s secret crime was brought to light - I thought it flowed well and I enjoyed the read!