The Official Writing Challenge
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10/20/05
A nicely captured moment in the circle of life. I felt that a little fleshing out of the charcters was needed, and would like to have known how Maggie was feeling as Marty asked Gene's permission to marry her, but the telling was nicely done. God bless.
10/22/05
I liked the use of the fruit tree for the conversation. I think it would be nice to know a little more of what the father is thinking as this is taking place. Nice entry.