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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: This Side of Paradise (not about the book) (07/14/11)

TITLE: Montana Pastures
By Sydney Avey
07/19/11


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My eyes view the world through windows
grimed with thin layers of history – my story,
My family’s story, basement stories piled high with relics
attic storage of once valued cast-offs
residue that clouds my vision
like splotched fingerprints on sunglasses
crust that can’t be cut away
like a cataract
or dissolved with ammonia
like a sponged-clean counter.

I have to go outside myself
to let the light in.

When I ride a horse
across a Montana pasture
see clouds puff with pride
smell sweet grass and sage
feel a summer wind caress my shoulder
as it sweeps across a field of dancing grass
and bids the prairie flax bend in praise
to the artist who tipped its anthers bright yellow
against a splash of soft coral
on tender butterscotch petal

I lift my face to heaven
And relish the day when God will paint me perfect.

For now we see through a glass, darkly, but then face to face: now I know in part; but then shall I know even as also I am known. 1Corinthians 13:12


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Juliette Chamberlain-Bond07/24/11
You paint a beautiful picture of the Montana Pastures. Your descriptions are vivid and evocative.
I particularly like the picture of the flax bowing in praise.

This would make a beautiful opening to a longer story.
Verna Cole Mitchell 07/24/11
The lovely poetry, filled with images just flows. "I love the day when God will paint me perfect." One of my favorite lines in a long time.
Eliza Evans 07/24/11
Gorgeous.

A lot of wonderful stuff in here. windows grimed by<>my story. Ain't it the truth.

That last line pulsed right through me. Perfect.
Lois Farrow07/24/11
Lovely, a great fit with the topic.
Charla Diehl 07/27/11
Powerful imagery throughout this poetic entry. Nicely done.
Cheryl von Drehle 07/27/11
As I read this beautiful description of this side of paradise, I am right there with you. And such a memorable example of the scripture verse