The Official Writing Challenge
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07/14/11
What a sad tale! The opening caught me by surprise, I thought he was really losing it--only to find that he didn't, until the very end. Good suspense.
07/18/11
Very sad tale.
07/18/11
A sad tale for sure, but a good read. I love the accent. Good job!
07/18/11
A sad tale for sure, but a good read. I love the accent. Good job!
07/18/11
Powerful and absorbing material that shows rather than tells. You've tapped into some extremely raw emotions with the right mix of clarity and confusion.
07/19/11
Your story is powerful in presentation with just the right ending.
07/19/11
Oh my! Such drama! My heart was racing all the way to the bitter end.
07/21/11
Congratulations on placing highly commended. Your story had me in suspense right from the beginning. Great job.
07/24/11
Excellent, Pat! LOVE the voice. Nothing cliché here.
Superb details and word choices A beautiful, fast-paced piece of writing.

Congratulations!
07/30/11
Full of rich emotion and suspense. Powerful writing!