The Official Writing Challenge
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07/14/11
What a sad tale! The opening caught me by surprise, I thought he was really losing it--only to find that he didn't, until the very end. Good suspense.
07/18/11
Very sad tale.
A sad tale for sure, but a good read. I love the accent. Good job!
A sad tale for sure, but a good read. I love the accent. Good job!
07/18/11
Powerful and absorbing material that shows rather than tells. You've tapped into some extremely raw emotions with the right mix of clarity and confusion.
Your story is powerful in presentation with just the right ending.
07/19/11
Oh my! Such drama! My heart was racing all the way to the bitter end.
07/21/11
Congratulations on placing highly commended. Your story had me in suspense right from the beginning. Great job.
07/24/11
Excellent, Pat! LOVE the voice. Nothing cliché here.
Superb details and word choices A beautiful, fast-paced piece of writing.

Congratulations!
07/30/11
Full of rich emotion and suspense. Powerful writing!