The Official Writing Challenge
This article has been read 483 times
Member Comments
Member
Date
This was grand, my heart was thumping in the beginning. It even took me a second or two to realize she had been shot with water. You had excellent timing with this and I stopped reading after a hearty laugh.
07/15/11
Very well done! I like the way you describe the movements of the boy. Stealthlike so as to create tension. Was glad the ending was a fun one!!
07/16/11
Seeming ominous beginning that turns into such a fun, lighthearted and entertaining story that left me giggling! Well written and wonderfully executed, enjoyed!
07/17/11
Love it, I was mortified to think this guy had shot his sister! Then, I was so relieved, very cool! Great job!
07/18/11
Clever tale told with well-timed escalation of tension leading to the delightful conclusion.

Bravo!
07/19/11
All previous comments mirror my thoughts. A true "out of the box" piece.
07/19/11
Very cute:) It switched so fast, I had trouble changing gears at first but I was glad it was just water!
07/19/11
You set the scene so well for a serious climate of international intrigue, but no - it was a (very entertaining) case of sibling riflery!!!
Well done!
Congratulations for placing 9th in level 3!