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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: War and Peace (not about the book) (07/07/11)

TITLE: The Mission
By Joe Moreland
07/13/11


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Adam moved carefully down the darkened hallway; weapon at the ready. Ahead of him, on the right, a light was cast from under a door - his beacon. The target lay behind that door. For just a moment, Adam felt a small doubt over what he was about to do - but it was gone in a flash, replaced by a soldier’s resolve to obey orders.

“Orders are orders,” he repeated wordlessly to himself.

Outside the door, Adam paused to steel himself to the task at hand. The trick, he knew, was going to be the entry. Getting inside the room and making a clean shot was going to be difficult. The target was on high alert and would be listening for any sound that was out of place. As he continued to ponder the situation, an answer suddenly presented itself.

With a loud pop the air conditioning unit labored into action. Adam grinned. That sound would cover the sound of him opening the door. All he had to do was wait until it shut off and cycled on again. He’d heard the sound just a few minutes ago, too, on his way up, so he knew it wouldn’t be long.

Adam settled in, his hand hovering over the doorknob with a soldier‘s patience. These moments of stillness were the most difficult. There was a peaceful quiet in the air that he knew was about to be shattered by shocking violence. While he waited Adam carefully avoided the thought of what would happen once the mission was complete. Deep in the heart of the enemy’s territory there would be no escape. - he had known it from the start.

“No escape. No capture.” Another silent mantra.

The A/C unit shut off. It wouldn’t be long now. His sweaty hand grasping the doorknob, Adam waited for the “pop”. Timing would mean everything now. When it came, he almost didn’t react fast enough - just barely managing to quickly and smoothly open the door and slip inside the room undetected.

Immediately he went into a well practiced crouch and moved to the nearest cover, which was a tall dresser. Peaking around the corner, Adam spotted his target sitting at a desk, back turned towards him.

“Perfect.” He thought. “All I have to do now is move quietly into position for the shot..” Adam could see that the target was writing furiously. “Apparently, just in time. Those must be the plans.”

******

Lisa was frantically scribbling out her notes when she suddenly felt something wet dripping down the side of her face. At first, it never occurred to her that she had been shot; she thought it must a leak from the air conditioning vent. The second shot, however, she felt.

“Adam!” She screamed, as she leapt from her chair. It took only a moment to register that her notes were soaked and for true rage to set in, then she turned just in time to see her, now fleeing, brother race from the room, slamming the door behind him.

In a heartbeat Lisa was through the door after him, screaming all the way.

“YOU GET BACK HERE YOU COWARDLY FINK!”

Lisa paused in the hallway, trying to figure out which way he would run. To his room? To the temporary safety of mom and dad?

Then she saw it. A trail of water running back towards the stairs. She smiled.

“Big mistake, little brother. There’s nowhere for you to hide downstairs. READY OR NOT, HERE I COME!”

Confidence can be your undoing, however, as Lisa found out when she got plastered with water again at the bottom of the stairs. She recovered quickly however, snatching a cushion from the sofa and beginning her pursuit with weapon in hand.

The furious big sister’s first shot was fired with deadly accuracy at a skinny back as Adam made a dash for the hallway that lead to the dining room. The cushion caught him dead center between the shoulder blades and sent him sprawling to the floor. Before he could realize what happened Lisa was on him and wrested the super soaker from his hands, unloading it all over his head, and then tossing it across the room.

Now the fight was on in earnest.

Upstairs, in the master bedroom, mom and dad sat up in bed and wondered what had happened to their briefly peaceful existence.

With a groan of despair, mom looked askance at dad.

“You just HAD to have a boy.”


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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 07/14/11
This was grand, my heart was thumping in the beginning. It even took me a second or two to realize she had been shot with water. You had excellent timing with this and I stopped reading after a hearty laugh.
Cathryn Hasek07/15/11
Very well done! I like the way you describe the movements of the boy. Stealthlike so as to create tension. Was glad the ending was a fun one!!
Linda Goergen07/16/11
Seeming ominous beginning that turns into such a fun, lighthearted and entertaining story that left me giggling! Well written and wonderfully executed, enjoyed!
Kim Hamlin07/17/11
Love it, I was mortified to think this guy had shot his sister! Then, I was so relieved, very cool! Great job!
Jim McWhinnie 07/18/11
Clever tale told with well-timed escalation of tension leading to the delightful conclusion.

Bravo!
Lillian Rhoades 07/19/11
All previous comments mirror my thoughts. A true "out of the box" piece.
Laury Hubrich 07/19/11
Very cute:) It switched so fast, I had trouble changing gears at first but I was glad it was just water!
Noel Mitaxa 07/19/11
You set the scene so well for a serious climate of international intrigue, but no - it was a (very entertaining) case of sibling riflery!!!
Well done!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 07/22/11
Congratulations for placing 9th in level 3!