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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: War and Peace (not about the book) (07/07/11)

TITLE: The Price of Peace
By Melanie Kerr
07/13/11


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I am a fool
To think I can
Prevail against
A greater man

My men I thought
In armour bright
Were more than equal
For the fight

Swords honed sharp
And bows strung taut
Mine the victory
So I thought

But how can I
Ten thousand strong
Stand up against
His awesome throng?

The dream of war
A throne to win
My chances now
Are pale and thin

And so I sit
Before the fight
Before my passion
Burns too bright

To squander not
Such precious life
In this foolish
Pointless strife

A way of peace
I must pursue
My folly now
I will undo

Iíll send a man
A flag of truce
And yield myself
Without excuse

Not king, but I
War every day
When old desires
Would have their way

Armed with passions
Base and foul
Deep within they
Roar and howl

They will forever
Bend the knee
To Him who rules
Over me

Peace is mine
Before His throne
Allegiance pledged
To God alone




Luke 14:31-32
Romans 7:21-25


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Eliza Evans 07/20/11
Your word choices are fantastic. Love it! Flows very well. I read it twice. Very, very good.
Lillian Rhoades 07/20/11
Your scripture reference, especially Romans 7, represents a continous challenge that confronts every believer. Paul's struggles gives hope to us all.
In my opinion,:-)at times your rhyming seemed somewhat forced, and I was a bit confused by some lines of the poem. Ex. "But how can I(?)
Ten thousand(?) strong." Or this: "Not King, but I" - meaning unclear.

I'm also left with this question: What is the overriding message of the poem as it relates to the title?