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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Checkout (06/09/11)

TITLE: It's Time to Go Home
By Trudie Nash


“Checkout time is at eleven,” my husband reminded me as he placed his bags in a neat pile near the door. “Boy!, am I ready to go home!” Being his usual punctual, no nonsense self, he had already packed; I on the other hand had chosen to sleep late, now as I threw clothes and cosmetics and gifts and souvenirs in my suitcases, I was rushing to meet my self-imposed deadline. James, my husband, was not sympathetic to my cry for help. He sat blissfully on the expansive balcony of our hotel suite enjoying the last hours of our stay in this beautiful Caribbean paradise. A quick look in his direction caught me off guard. The sky, soft and blue, glorious with its billowing clouds, had melted into the ocean making the horizon on this early morning a breathtaking testimony of God’s greatness. Looking at it overwhelmed me, and I suddenly had a desire to pray.

“Isn’t that sky simply beautiful? My husband had come back into the room, but he didn’t look like the same man. “Honey,” I blushed, “you look so handsome!” “What were you doing out there?”

“Huh, oh, nothing, just thinking.” He walked towards me and gently grabbing my hands pulled me up towards him. “You look pretty good yourself; there is some kind of glow about you.” Then he kissed me with a tenderness we hadn’t shared in a long time. After twenty-five years of marriage, tender intimacy seemed lost. We were just comfortable knowing the other one was there.

“Let’s pray,” he said, “for some reason something inside me just wants to shout! I feel like I could go home today, really go home, to the Lord, and not regret it one bit.” His voiced quivered, and I saw that in his eyes just like mine there were tears.

We knelt down by the sliding glass door that lead to the balcony. A breeze, cool and refreshing, brushed against our faces, its gentle touch felt like angel’s wings and seemed to encourage us in our desire to pray to God thanking him for all he had done; to worship him for who he was.

The rap on the door came as we said “amen.” Looking at the radio clock we were startled when we realized we had prayed for over an hour. “You folks ready to checkout?” the handsome young porter asked? “I heard you praying, and I didn’t want to interrupt so we all stood here and prayed too.” We looked out the door and standing in the hallway was an amazing sight. There were, I don’t know many, maids, porters, and other hotel guest standing there with heads bowed and eyes filled with tears.

Just then we heard the most melodious yet unusual sound. A mix between a trumpet and cello, it was both startling and soothing. We all turned, as if on cue, towards the open balcony door and as a great white cloud parted we heard the sweetest voice say, “It’s check out time my children,” and in what must have been that twinkling of an eye we’ve heard so much about, we were changed and were on our way home.

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Deborah Porter 06/16/11
This entry is this week's randomly chosen winner of our weekly bonus prize--a free ratings feedback report. The author will be contacted today via the Private Messenger service with more information.

Congratulations. :-)

Deb (Challenge Coordinator)

Helen Curtis06/18/11
Congrats on the bonus award for the week!

I liked reading this entry. The descriptions were lovely, and the ending was very peaceful. Sometimes it's scary to think about the end of days, but really we shouldn't be afraid, we know who it is who has it all in control! Well done!
Robert Johnson06/19/11
Good job, I enjoyed your story.
Linda Goergen06/19/11
Oh, I really enjoyed this! I love how you had everyone sensing in their spirits to pray just prior to the rapture and how this reading left me with such a sense of peace. Great job and Congratulations on the free ratings report!
Noel Mitaxa 06/19/11
Wow! What a welcome to look forward to.