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06/17/11
Oh I love the way this story ended! I love how instead of just condemning Tommy, the people took the time to look at his situation and chose to invest time and love and prayer into Tommy, what a great payoff!
06/18/11
Love this story and the happy ending!
06/18/11
Love this story and the happy ending!
06/19/11
Well-written and enjoyable story that many of us can identify with as children. Your line, "Mr. Wilson smiled at Jimmy, his eyes narrowing at Tommy" reveals that the storeowner didn't trust Tommy.
I knew severl minister's sons growing up. Unfortunately, they acted like Jimmy instead of Tommy.:)
06/19/11
Great story and great twist at the close. And did you know how preachers' kids get that way? It's by playing with other people's kids....
06/19/11
I'm sure this story has played out in real life many times. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this! Your ending made me smile!