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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Outlook (06/02/11)

TITLE: The Realm Of Insularity
By Janice Fitzpatrick
06/09/11


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Not too far
From mountain sides
a city dwelled below
The Realm of Insularity
it’s ruler, King Narrow

Once beauty
had resided
and color could be found
from petals to the inner courts
but minds can turn unsound

Embittered
by his wife’s death
he ruled with iron fist
when brightness died with his sweet queen
her presence he did miss

His outlook
reflected pain
from that dreadful day
and others suffered greatly
as all he saw was gray

He declared
with empty heart,
“Only gray will be allowed
whether flowers, or shrubbery
yes, even skies and cloud!”

No sunrays
were permitted
as parapets stood tall
no windows or looking glass
just lifeless blocks of wall

Everything
was painted gray
garments and fur of beast
Each meal was rather dreary
as citizens would feast

Tinted food
matched silverware
and pewter mugs of drink
but no one dared to speak their mind
‘less they be in the clink

*******************************************************
A rider
very noble
journeyed into town,
who viewed such monotony
he had to look around

“Oh, pray tell
what have we here
and why is it so bleak?
a kingdom so neglected
necessitates a peek”

As he strode
the people stared
at this peculiar sight
and blinked in such amazement
as with each step spread light

News trekked fast
as guards approached
and blocked the riders lane
forcing him to follow them
in bands of steel and chain

“What brings thee
to my kingdom?”
the ruler’s eyes held fear
“Your strange luminosity
will not be welcome here”

“Why the gloom?”
the stranger asked
the king would pay no heed,
“Lock him in a dungeon dark,”
he wiped a sweaty bead

Time would pass
like clouds of gray
but not the query posed
though his conscience troubled him
no reason was disclosed

************************************************************
A cavern
that was hidden
from public eye or ear
dwelled a ferocious beast
who now drew very near

The earth shook
as he trampled
anything in his path
the folks of Insularity
were fearful of his wrath

A coward
in noble cloth,
the king, now a color pale
ran quickly to the prison gates
and opened up the jail

“Please save us now
from this beast
who surely brings us doom
I know I need a change of heart
from this life of gloom.”

“I use to
live uprightly
but gray my heart did turn
will you remove this daunting beast?
a lesson I did learn”

The stranger
of noble heart
bid mercy on the king
and saved the realm from havoc
while nervous hands would wring

“Be gone thee
from this city
no more will it be gray”
The monster smiled satisfied,
“I will be on my way

for too long
I have observed
this atmosphere so bleak
that it angered me inside
and chaos I would wreak

No, I shall
never bother
but change this shade bizarre
to a kingdom full of color
spread joy from near to far”

From that day
the king’s sad heart
filled with the rider’s light,
the Realm of Insularity
is now The Realm of Bright...


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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 06/09/11
I'm in awe of your talent. You tell an awesome story in a poem with great rhythm and unforced rhymes. Nicely done:)
Linda Goergen06/09/11
Oh, I really enjoyed this wonderful narrative/fable poem –your land of narrow-minded outlook was expertly woven, imaginative, well written, visually and emotionally captivating - Kudos to your artistry!
Leola Ogle 06/12/11
Delightful tale told in excellent poetry! Good job! God bless!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 06/17/11
Congratulations for placing 11th in Advanced!
Janice Cartwright06/18/11
I love the way your first line invites the child in me to imagine. And then as I go along I see so much symbolism cached inside: it is challenging to play detective and find them among the layers. Your poem puts me in mind of the poor people of Narnia turned to stone by the "White Witch." The Lord is truly inspiring your writing, Janice. Looking forward each week to see your next submission.