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06/13/11
Nicely written, good for the time period. How precious the friendship expressed, and the faith comes through loud and clear. I enjoyed this.
06/13/11
A very inspiring tale of God looking after a widow in need.
Found it poignant and realistic and so very well written! Thanks!
What a creative way to blend history into a story. I loved it all the way through.
06/14/11
This was a very creative entry for the topic and beautifully written. It flowed through a dilema and sadness to a 'feel good' ending. Loved it!
06/14/11
aw, loved this! I had a hunch Samuel wasn't imagining things.
Good way to show how God will always provide
06/15/11
good story and you kept the interest going. loved the picture you painted of Samuel. I was not sure what happened to Amanda's husband but clearly that was a subject that was not to be discussed :-)
few red ink spots :- would you say 'he spit'? I think spits or spat is more grammatically correct for third person and is Amanda a likely name for 1903 certainly in UK it would have been an unusual one at the turn of the century and it is a much more modern one.
06/15/11
I enjoyed Samuel's sweet personality, and the last line was a chuckler. Great work.
I loved this. I wish your title hadn't given the ending away. It reminded me of the time my son was positive he saw a black boot go up the fireplace on Christmas. He's 20 and still insists he saw it. I was captivated by every word. I liked how the MC was named Amanda and you used the sparrow to make your point. I left the story with a smile in my heart ( and a twinkle in my eye:) )
Congratulations for placing 13th in Masters and 15 overall!