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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Outlook (06/02/11)

TITLE: The Growing Up Of Andrew Malone
By Lisa Fowler
06/08/11


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The Growing Up Of Andrew Malone


As bad days go, it was the worst. We were neighbors less than two weeks when mom died. With all of the foot traffic coming and going I almost missed him standing alone, quietly behind the fence.

“Hey kid. Sorry about your mom.”

I slung a half cocked smile his direction, shuffled my foot over the dusty ground and turned to walk away. That was the last I saw of him for three weeks - until grandma moved in.

I was playing catch - throwin’ the ball high as I could and running under it; pretending it was a high fly ball to right field. That’s what I was aimin’ to be - the greatest outfielder in the history of baseball - that is until Mr. Duncan’s life weaved its tapestry into mine.

“Hey kid. Give me a hand?”

“Sure. How do I get over there?”

“Loose boards in the fence ‘bout half way down.”

I parted the boards and crossed into his world.

He had the broadest shoulders I’d ever seen, a skinny smile, and ebony hair with a hint of grey that glistened when the sunlight caught it just right, and he toted a shovel over his right shoulder like a soldier marching into battle. He was a quiet fellow, never said too much and when he did, it was short, choppy sentences.

“Grab a bucket ‘n c’mon.”

“These sure are pretty flowers, sir.”

“Duncan.”

“Sir?”

“Name’s Duncan. Jack Duncan.”

“These sure are pretty flowers Mr. Duncan.”

“Most of ‘em are older than you, kid.”

For the next five years I spent the better part of every summer and daily, after school with Mr. Duncan. I shoveled manure up to my knees, turned compost heaver than my own weight full of rotting scraps and earthworms big around as my little finger. I moved flowers from shade to sun and back again and learned why I was doing it; planted heirloom seeds and watched in amazement as tiny sprouts popped through loamy soil, and I learned the common and proper names of the more than three hundred plants in Mr. Duncan’s yard.

The harder I worked, the more I talked. The more I talked, the more he listened - often without a response. No topic was off limits. Mr. Duncan filled life’s empty void and quickly became my mentor as well as my friend. He taught me to spit like a man, laugh ‘til I cried, and embrace the land like a farmer.

A chunk of me died the day Mr. Duncan went to be with the Lord. The soil I’d learned to treasure now bound and imprisoned the two people I loved most in the world and I hated the sight of it. I kicked the fence where I’d first heard his voice and nailed tight the boards I’d used to enter his world. I resolved if I never saw another blossom it would be too soon. I knew that day, my life was forever changed.

Now a young man of seventeen, I readied plans to go off to college. Dreams that once sparkled beneath baseball’s diamonds now glistened amid horticulture’s gemstones, and the carvings of Mr. Duncan’s mentoring cut deeply into my restless spirit, but my heart hung heavy under discouragement’s fog.

I mustered courage to peer through the weathered fence one last time into the world that grew me to a man. In each blossom and every petal I saw Mr. Duncan‘s smile. With every breeze that blew lilies’ aroma and gardenias sweetness past my nose I breathed in his patience and inhaled his sharp wit and abbreviated wisdom.

“Hey, kid.”

My heart skipped a beat.

“Are you Andrew Malone?”

“Yes. Yes I am.”

“I’m Bill. Bill Duncan, Jack’s brother. Jack spoke of you often. He really loved you, you know. He never had any kids of his own. He thought of you as the son he always wanted. In fact, he loved you so much he wanted you to have this.”

The stranger, who bore a ghostly resemblance to his brother, passed an envelope through the splintered, rotting boards. I opened it, carefully.

“Say mister, I can‘t take this. It’s the deed to Mr. Duncan‘s land.”

“He wanted you to have it; said you were the only one that loved the land like he did. He knew you would cherish his years of hard work.”

I dropped to my knees. Things, it seems, may suddenly be looking up.


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Janice Fitzpatrick06/10/11
Oh my goodness. This tugged at my heart and surprised me at the end with a good 'ol " I didn't expect that." Very nicely written and I loved the camaraderie between Mr. Duncan and the boy. What an earthy and beautiful piece! Loved it!!
Leola Ogle 06/11/11
What a delightful, heartwarming story. I loved it! God bless!
Linda Goergen06/11/11
Charming story of the different stages and circumstances and outlooks of Andrew’s life. Would be wonderful if every lonely, lost and hurting boy could have a Jack Duncan come into their life! This story also a reminder to be on the lookout for the child or person who may need just some loving companionship, an extra pat on the back. Good job on this!
Patricia Protzman06/16/11
Congratulations on your 3rd place win.
Kim Hamlin06/16/11
Congratulations Lisa, great job!
Noel Mitaxa 06/16/11
Loved the feel of this, all the way through to the heartwarming twist at the end. A Well-deserved placing.
Linda Goergen06/16/11
Congratulations on your well deserved win!
Joe Moreland06/21/11
This piece touched me when I first read it, and I wanted to comment at that time but was in a rush and couldn't. Then, when I had time, I couldn't remember the title. All week I have been intending to get around to any of last week's winners that I had not already commented on, and was really happy to find this one amongst the top three in advanced. Contratulations!


   
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