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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Outlook (06/02/11)

TITLE: Did You See?
By Leola Ogle
06/04/11


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Did you see her today, as she walked your way?
Head down, shuffling feet, trying not to be seen
Not saying a word, though longing to be heard
Misery, apathy, begging, praying to be set free

From the prison she’s in, looking out from within
Frightened, afraid to live, but more afraid to die
Crushed, bruised, battered, youthful dreams shattered
Prince Charming, happily ever after, to her all a lie

It’s your fault says he, she knows that can’t be
He belittles, abuses, ‘til she assumes his disgrace
Outlook hopeless and grim, terrified of him
What to do? Should she tell? Where to go to be safe?

No family or friends, took time to see within
Beyond the smile, see her pain and suffering
The neighbors next door, choosing to ignore
The screams, the bruises, the endless fighting

Did you hear her today, what she had to say?
Timidly speaking, daring to trust and confide
What was she told? “You just have to be bold!
Stand your ground, don’t back down, don’t hide!”

Did you see her today, as she walked your way?
In the door, up the aisle, and right past your pew
This her very last hope, no longer able to cope
Did you notice? Feel her pain? What did you do?

Did you see her today, as she was carried away?
Lying on a gurney, covered with a sheet
“I love you,” Jesus said, as she took her last breath
No more pain, suffering – in death set free

Do I see them walk by, hearing their cry?
The lost, broken-hearted, battered, abused
God, please help me see, those in front of me
Share Your heart, Your love, so they may see You.

For you see, she was me, I was she, though set free
For I didn’t die, no not I, I survived, I’m alive!

Thank you, Jesus!


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Linda Goergen06/10/11
Very powerful and passionate piece and a story that can never be told too much...stark truth screams from your lines, of how women remain in prisons of abuse, from FEAR/low self image or seeing no way out and how bystanders will allow it from ignorance and deliberately blinded eyes!

This poem’s potent message of never allowing ourselves or others to be abused has purpose way beyond this challenge! May God use it!
Noel Mitaxa 06/12/11
There is a powerful challenge here for whoever reads this, and I agree that it needs to be spread further to a wider audience.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 06/12/11
This echoes the cries of far too many and it is easy to look the other way and think mind your business but you showed that it is our business. We must hear those silent cries of help. Beautiful and my heart hurts for everyone who sees themselves in your words.
Joe Moreland06/12/11
This is powerful and moving. God gives us eyes that we might see, but how often do we shut those eyes to what He tries to show us? Great message, but even more so because the structure, cadence and imagery is so powerfully written.

This is one of those pieces that humbles me as a writer. Great job!
Sarah Elisabeth 06/12/11
So many great lines in this one! Wow. What a tale. Thanks
Kelvin Fowler06/13/11
Speak it out sister, speak it out. I live in a block of apartments and have about eleven flats boarding ours, I pray through the screams of my neighbours, but I don't know where they come from.

Great message, horrible subject, bless you as you share it. Well well well done, please oh please write more. Cheers
Colin Swann06/13/11
It's awful when a man or woman suffers abuse - but praise God for so many wonderful relationships that are around. The message is clear it's not permissible to abuse another human being. Thanks!
Patricia Protzman06/13/11
A powerful reminder of real life. Unfortunately, the story of so many women and men.
Danielle King 06/13/11
WOW! Powerful piece with a message to bear in mind always! Well done.
Edmond Ng 06/16/11
A sad reality. We certainly need to be more sensitive in meeting the needs of the lonely and the downcast. I'm glad the poem ended on a positive note—a reminder of Romans 6:4 and 2 Corinthians 2:14. Excellent piece!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 06/17/11
Congratulations for placing 6th in your level and 22 overall!