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06/02/11
WOW-WOW-WOW-Powerful truth in this poem that shows Satan is alive and working too, in any revival…and we really, all need our armor checked and rechecked as we battle. And yes, as Christians, the spiritual pain is so great and grievous, when we see one of our own fall in battle like that! I like how your poem shows the sweet side and then the sorrowful side that often comes with a great spiritual battle! Excellent job on this!
06/03/11
How hard it is to be in the world but not of it. How easy it is to be seudced by it.
06/06/11
Wow, you have packed so much into this - without slipping into sensationalism or getting out of balance!
06/07/11
WOW from me too! Powerful message, brilliant writing. Got to be a winner!
You presented a gripping picture of "sellout" in your poem.
06/08/11
this is so good.I can just imagine reading this one out and the slowness and faster pace and the quiet and the louder parts like a piece of music. The theme reminds me of the passage at the beginning of Acts where the early church was doing so well and then those foolish people lied and pretended to give all the money from selling a strip of land.. committed fraud and lies and God stuck them dead.
Well I hope it wins.. I think it is very powerful
Wow you said so much with so few words, I have chills.
Congratulations for ranking 8th in level 3!
06/13/11
very gripping Kelvin, I felt your poem, and you can't always say that about writing, great job!