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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Sellout (05/26/11)

TITLE: The Dance
By Leola Ogle


Seemed a harmless kind, the girl didn’t mind
A little marijuana seemed innocent, hardly a sin
She would stay in control, never losing her soul
To addiction, destruction - ignoring convictions within

She was beautiful and smart, longing to be part
Of the partying, fun-loving, jet-setting crowd
Oh, glorious path, leading to pain and wrath
Dancing with death concealed in a shroud

The dance marched on, to a beguiling song
Marijuana led to drugs of the harder kind
Thinking she’s in control, protecting her soul
As drugs devoured, destroyed her body and mind

Needle stuck in her arm, no need for alarm
Ravings, cravings, selling her body for a fix
Thinking she’s in control, won’t sellout her soul
The dance of denial keeping her locked in bliss

Beauty long gone, feeling lost and alone
Dancing the dance like a puppet on a string
Trying to find her way back, get on the right track
Scared, snared, tangled in chains, wandering

Completely sold out, to drugs no doubt
Another song, another dance but faint memories
Who’s willing to care, for the girl in the snare?
Dancing out of control, crying to be free

One heard her cry, for her He did die
His blood, His love flowed from Calvary
His words simple and true, “I did it for you”
“Come my child, I’m all you need.”

She continued dancing on, to a different song
Set free, liberty, beautiful once again
Giving Him control, freed her captive soul
Fulfillment, contentment in dancing with Him

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Joanna Stricker06/02/11
Fresh subject and vibrant description, nice.
Linda Goergen06/02/11
This poem, a vivid awareness of how seeming innocent indulgence of drugs can pull one in so deep it is near impossible to find escape…but nothing is impossible with Jesus, no addiction, no sin greater than the power of His shed blood and His love and mercy. This poem also a reminder of how important it is for us to pray for those entrapped by sin, not write anyone off!

Good message and way to use the challenge word!
Kelvin Fowler06/03/11
Lovely written bouncing flowing poem and written on a subject close to my heart.

Compromise and then sin is a slippery path. Those rescued from such a life are some of the most inspiring believers that I know.

Good subject, well written, well done.

Cheers Kel
ps I love reading challenge 'poems'. :-)
Theresa Santy 06/03/11
Lovely. I liked how you transitioned the nature of the dance, so smooth was the transition, but so astounding the difference.
Noel Mitaxa 06/06/11
You have lifted the lid on the deceitfulness of addiction; as the process moves from flimsy cobwebs to the heavy cables that are humanly impossible to break. I love the gentle way that you have described Jesus' call to break those cables. Well done.
Robert Johnson06/06/11
Excellent! Great job at getting the point across. Really enjoyed the flow and pace of the story and the great way you carried the reader through from beginning to end of how one becomes ensnared in sinful and life destroying behavior. Also really liked your smooth transition into freedom from that addiction in Christ.
Michael Throne06/09/11
Great poem! Well done. I love the idea that we think we can dance with the devil and not suffer (or lose control). This is excellent!
Kim Hamlin06/13/11
Great job Leola, touched my heart. I think it's an awesome piece.
maria antonia rahartati bambang haryo06/13/11
Wow, an enjoyable to read poem, Leola. Very good and well written thoughts. Your words flow nicely, with great imagery. Thank you for sharing.