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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Fruit (10/10/05)

TITLE: Healthy lifestyles - a question of balance
By Suzanne R
10/14/05


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The leader of our ‘healthy lifestyle group’ stood tall and slim, glowing with health and vigour.

“I’m looking forward to hearing your positive propaganda. United, we must combat the advertisements promoting unbalanced eating habits, and primarily addictions to fat, sugar and caffeine.”

Well prepared, I looked forward to a stimulating evening.

Sally picked up her bag of props. “Me first – I’m nervous – just want to be done!”

She set out a bowl of apples, a strip of milk chocolate and a photo frame.

“This apple,” said Sally, picking up a Pink Lady, “is sweet, crisp and delicious. It’s like the healthy glow of my daughter’s cheeks.” She held up the photo of her two-year-old cherub. With windblown blonde hair, her blue eyes and cherry-red lips smiled infectiously.

“This chocolate is poo-brown. Like her dirty … um … you know!”

Sally sat down amidst a round of applause and gales of laughter.

I squirmed in my seat, having second thoughts about my presentation….

Jane stood up. “I’ve got a photo, too, from our Japan trip last year. Look at the sun setting over Mount Fuji. See how red the sky is. And the stark outline of the mountain. I clung to my husband, almost buried myself in his chest, the awesomeness was so intense. I remember that moment every time I bite into a Fuji apple.”

Everyone roared with laughter, and Jane’s face went as red as the apple in her hand. She stammered, “Yeah, um, well, this fancy chocolate ball can’t compare.”

Couldn’t she have compared some red candy? Will anyone notice if I slip out?

Briana the bodybuilder stood up. She had a chopping board, a knife, four oranges, a juicer, two glasses and a can of cola. As she spoke, she deftly cut and squeezed the oranges.

“How many day’s worth of vitamin C is in one glass of freshly squeezed orange juice? Not one. Not two. But five days! And that’s not all, folks. You also get fibre, antioxidants, minerals and more. Just feast your eyes on this bright colour.” Downing a mouthful, she murmured, “Ooh, that’s refreshing.”

Opening the can of cola, she poured half a glassful. “This, on the other hand, it is only good for cleaning silver.” At that, she removed a silver ring and dropped it in.

Diet cola is quite different, I’m sure.

Tracey stepped up to the table with only a picture. It was of her son with a slice of watermelon reaching from ear to ear. “I took this photo on Saturday. Remember how it was so hot we felt we would implode. The kids were upset when I came home with a whopping great melon instead of the chocolate icecream I usually buy for a treat. But you know what? It was more refreshing that that poo-brown sludge could possibly have been.”

Poo-brown sludge? I had a sudden urge to go to the bathroom … and hide until everyone had gone home.

Jacquie was impressive in her business suit. Her presentation was short, sweet and to the point. She placed a banana and a chocolate-coated wafer on the table.

“This banana is hygienically wrapped. Consummation promotes regular bowel function. It is an excellent source of potassium and fibre. This wafer is also hygienically wrapped. Consummation promotes constipation. It is an excellent source of … nothing.”

Jacquie sat down amidst applause. It was my turn.

Metaphorically, literally or both, I was about to die at the hands of ladies I’d once considered friends.

Taking a deep breath, feigning confidence, I placed my bowl of strawberries and chocolate dipping sauce on the table.

“As you bite into a strawberry, the sweetness explodes like a spray of brilliant red fireworks on a jet-black night. So how does one prevent the explosion from dissipating the goodness too far afield?”

I waited as the ladies digested the distressing dilemma.

“Dip the strawberry into the tub of chocolate sauce first. This not only solves the dissipation problem, but it tastes divine.”

I popped the chocolate-coated strawberry into my mouth to an audible gasp from the group.

Briana’s knife was brandished. My blood ran cold.

With a roar, every last group member descended on me.

The apples were quickly chopped into pieces and also immersed in the poo-brown goo.

With just a hint of chocolate sauce on her lips, our leader summarized the evening.

“The Lord gives us all good things to enjoy ... balanced properly, of course. Have a good week ladies.”


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Denise Stanford10/17/05
Excellent, what good fun, and so very true. Characters were highly believable, you created tension and kept it rising until... Mm-mm I can just taste the strawberry... with chocolate sauce naturally!
Pat Guy 10/17/05
I really enjoyed reading this! :) Too funny and I didn't anticipate the ending! Great choclate ending. And Hey! Chocolate is at the top of the Pyramid! It's super healthy too! But I don't know about that visual- ummm - I'll have to go get my dark choco -chips and work on it! Loved this! :)
B Brenton10/17/05
Hahahahahahahahaha! I wonder whos this is. I like it muchly. You write with humour and flair. Think you might bag yourself a winning spot this week (or at least commended) chickie!
Karen Schravemade10/18/05
I loved this!!! So light hearted and yet written with such a deft and flawless touch. Well done.
Lynda Lee Schab 10/18/05
LOL. This was great. I love humor with a message. Oh - and good job with placing the subliminal messages ...you really made me have to go to the bathroom. LOL
Great entry.
Blessings, Lynda
janet rubin10/18/05
Amusing!
Val Clark10/18/05
ļ Very enjoyable read. A big cast of characters handled well. Drama built throughout as the main character became increasingly uncomfortable. Great twist at the end. Love that the knife wielding Briana was a body builder Yeggy
Linda Watson Owen10/18/05
So cute and enjoyable! M-m-m chocolate covered fresh strawberries! Wish I'd read this while there was still time to hit the grocery store! Haha!
terri tiffany10/20/05
This was so funny! I, too, loved the ending..especially how the knife was brandished..it made one pausein expectation!
Julianne Jones10/21/05
Very enjoyable. Your characters were true to life and I loved it that you were true to yourself! Great job at portraying the tension and the ending was unexpected.
Karen Ward10/21/05
Oh LOL! You know I can relate! Balance is SO important. Every food group should be balanced with chocolate! Loved their presentations and the main character's discomfort. :) Karen
Brandi Roberts10/21/05
When I neared the end, it had me worried (Were these women gonna kill you for eating a chocolate-laden strawberry????) Then I read the rest and was relieved. LOL Great job!
Laurie Glass10/21/05
This is great and it drew me right in. A good message that was very well presented. Creative piece on the topic as well.
Debbie Sickler10/21/05
I loved how you showed her fear of speaking to the group and then ending with her presentation being the best,
Garnet Miller 10/21/05
See.. she was scared to do her presentation for nothing! I too love to dip strawberries ( and marshmallows:)) into chocolate sauce. It's good for what ails you! Thanks for the article.
Kathryn Wickward10/22/05
Besides, if it was dark chocolate, it was okay. Lots of antioxidants in dark chocolate. :)
Joanne Malley10/23/05
Now, this was a different! Creative, humorous and well written! Jo
Deborah Porter 10/24/05
Suzanne, the judges did like your entry, and so did I. You ranked 10th in the Level 3 list, and 18th overall (out of 135 entries). So well done! There really wasn't much separating the entries in the top 30. Love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)
Crista Darr10/29/05
Hooray! This is LOL funny Suzanne. Great suspense, great conclusion, and great message.