The Official Writing Challenge
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05/28/11
Comical read…a one thousand dollar bill for one minute of looking and telling me I did it, with no further treatment would bring my voice back too I think ...maybe your story has invented a new cure laryngitis! LOL LOL LOL
05/28/11
You pulled me in quickly and drug me all the way to the end. Excellent writing.
05/29/11
A very animated story, with strong characters and credible dialogue. Yet, while I also enjoy the truth of Romans 8:28, I felt that this text was tacked on. Maybe your dialogue could have included a subtle lead-in like: "I've prayed so much about what to do, but he didn't do anything for me!" Otherwise, a great snapshot of life.