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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Outlandish (05/19/11)

TITLE: Outlandish
By Kelvin Fowler
05/25/11


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An aroma of pork and milk
escaping through creased skin
emanating from the lines in her face
smile lines
simple, honest smile lines
releasing the luxurious scent
of a simple peasant.

Dancing behind her skin
a pair of emerald eyes
revealing a heart
empty and overflowing
searching for a place to give.

And I was that place
a traveller, a foreigner
passing through
tired, sore and hungry
and needing nourishment.

A village breakfast
sausage and eggs,
black bread, tomato,
cheese, cucumber and honey.
Coffee, strong, rich,
long black tar.

This is the soul
of a village farming wife
good food
strong coffee
for simple folk.

Seeing my weariness
feeling my tiredness
she gave me
stuffed in sweating plastic
a village lunch.

A single glistening tomato
heavy black bread
and couched in between
was one and a half inches
of delicious
artery clogging
pork fat.

The generosity of a peasant
an outlandish gift
fat on my bones
for another hard
and hot day
on the road.


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Lyn Churchyard05/27/11
I love your description of the old woman. It created a scene easy to visualise. I could see her green eyes and wide smile, and the generosity of her heart towards a road weary traveller.
Leola Ogle 05/27/11
A simple yet tender story. Well written. Thanks for sharing! God bless!
Allison Egley 05/27/11
Oh, this is good. I was wondering where the title fit in... I thought I knew, and you revealed that I was right at the end. Good job!
Linda Goergen05/28/11
Loved the imagery in your poem, how it drips along from stanza to stanza building and increasing the emotion needed to feel the message at the end!

Yes, most would think it outlandish to give when one is so poor, just like the widow in the bible, giving what little she had, but it being(meaning)so much! God loves outlandish acts such as this!

Good job!
Theresa Santy 05/28/11
Excellent, masterful use of words.
Lisa Fowler05/28/11
Your word pictures are as clear as morning sun after a night of hard rain. Excellent! Thanks for sharing this.
Noel Mitaxa 05/29/11
Great word pictures.
Danielle King 05/31/11
Brilliant! Skilled use of words from the first line, which made me chuckle, through to the end. Beautifull.
diana kay06/02/11
lovely poetry :-)
Michael Throne06/02/11
I loved this story. It would be so hard to accept anything; Id feel the need to give back, which would be inappropriate. All the more reason to share randomly with those in need. Great piece!