The Official Writing Challenge
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05/19/11
Well done! I was a little on the edge of my seat towards the end, hoping they would escape. You told it well.
05/21/11
Great atmosphere and suspense in this. I was wondering what was happening and how they were going to get out of something that seemed so dark. Nicely done, the ending worked well--I'm glad her mother decided to go too. Thanks for sharing.
05/22/11
This is heartbreaking. I love that the young person had the courage to leave, and apparently the conviction that it was an abusive situation he (she?) was leaving, not God. Good message.
Wow. I can relate to this. What a message and I liked your build up of tension/ climax and loved the narrow escape at the end. Well done and Congratulations on your win! Blessings!
05/27/11
Your story was so suspenseful all the way through. I really liked the climax, especially the line about the quiet mouse that was my mother and driving away in a VW chariot.

Congratulations on your EC award.