The Official Writing Challenge
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05/12/11
Interesting piece. I liked the aspect on life in an office cubicle. Very creative!

Good Job :)
05/15/11
Oh - love the surprise tie-in at the end. Definitely wasn't expecting it. Creative.
Nice object lesson! I had no clue where you were going with this, but you wrapped it up beautifully.
I loved the word picture created by your "squeak squeak." It was a surprise ending. Only one thing I would change 'at the ocean floor' to on the ocean floor. It caused me to have to read the sentence twice. Great piece, though.