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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Outgoing (05/05/11)

TITLE: the wild geese
By Jim McWhinnie
05/07/11


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from the barley fields now harvested,
the wild geese take to wing
as if answering a mystic beckoning from a place beyond
this time to which we cling,
this last mellowing of summer’s joy,
this fading amber of softening light
when the savory smoke of distant fires
drifts among the mountain firs.
the wild geese, in their time, must leave me now
for it is the way of time,
this sounding of this soulful chime,
this call, this fateful call,
this wild and holy call from beyond the mists of days yet to be,
an unknown future that has both always been
but yet has ne’er been before,
this nearly present immortal door,
through which we all must pass
that is,
if we dare to live beyond these barley fields
we’ve only known,
in the summertime,
the sweet summertime,
when all was hope of coming harvest
and dreams of dreams to come.
yes, i hear the flutter of their wings
as the wild geese rise for their outgoing
in the fading amber of the softening light
and in the smoke of distant fires.


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Helen Curtis05/13/11
It's taken a few reads for me to click with this one, (possibly due to the background din from my kids!). For me, there are 2 pictures being portrayed in this, one about wild geese and the other, so subtly, about the human spirit. I'm so glad I took the time to keep reading this beautifully written piece.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 05/13/11
This is beautiful. No matter how sick I feel when I hear the geese calling I must get out of bed and wave to them.
Sharlyn Guthrie05/13/11
Your words and imagery are beautiful. This is a wonderfully creative take on the topic.
Noel Mitaxa 05/14/11
Beautiful and evocative imagery and rhythm.
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/15/11
Absolutely lovely--wish I'd written it.
Lillian Rhoades 05/15/11
Free verse is always a challenge to me( no pun intended.:-) I also had to read it over several times (probably as it should be)to appreciate the beauty of the words and to play with the different subjective interpretations. I often think that poetry has something in common with the Scriptures. The more you read it, the more meaning you glean from it.

Thanks for a great piece of art.
Catrina Bradley 05/15/11
This is hauntingly beautiful, and gets better with each read.
diana kay05/18/11
i love this and i can see it set to music and spoken with the background film of the geese in flight.
well it is on my top ten list for definite and thank you for writing it.
Theresa Santy 05/19/11
This piece fills my heart with a peace, and a longing, wrapped together. You have a talent for using words to move a soul. Congratulations.
diana kay05/19/11
Yes! top of the tops :-) congrats
Dolores Stohler05/19/11
Simply beautiful! Nostalgic pictures filled my mind as your poem progressed and I was at one with the fields and the geese. Great job.
Benjamin Graber05/19/11
Wow. This is EXCELLENT! I love the feeling you put into your poetry! Congratulations on first place, Jim!!!!
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/19/11
Congratulations on BOB for this week Jim with your wonderful poem!
Jean Beier05/19/11
Beautiful poem and great writing. Congratulations and God bless.
Bonnie Bowden05/20/11
The wild geese flying away always reminds of the end of a season and the beginning of a new one.

You are a gifted poet who can make the words come alive and turn them into the emotions of the soul.

Congratulations on your 1st place EC award. I sometimes am able to tell it is yours by the use of small letters.