The Official Writing Challenge
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05/10/11
Oh Man! That's scary!
It would make it easier to read if you left an extra line between paragraphs.
Now, to make sure my cell phone is charged...
05/10/11
I love how you "broke down" the stereotypes here. Nicely done. You definitely had me scared.
05/10/11
Good story! You kept my attention all the way through. God does watch over us. Thank you.
05/11/11
I love how you have overturned my expectations of a sugary answer to prayer with the honesty of real life, and skilfully infused it with a touch of divine humour.
Minor picky point: you misspelled "border" as "boarder;" and I echo the request for more spacing between those very well-written paragraphs.
The title was great.
05/13/11
I echo the spacing suggestions! Detracts when it all runs together!

But still this was a well written, vivid and emotional read! I love the ending about God seeing behind the masks! Great job!
Congratulations for placing 6th in level 3!
05/24/14
Agree that this is a scary picture of what, all too often, makes someone a crime statistic. Funny about those "masks," but Satan is the duke of deception, isn't he.