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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Blowout (04/28/11)

TITLE: Poof! It’s Gone!
By Ruth Neilson
04/28/11


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I stand here,
Uncomprehending,
Unable to fathom all of what I see
Wedge clouds blowing through
Blowing out entire buildings

Acting as if they were never there
An amazing magic trick,
If only it wasn't so life impacting
Bricked churches—ruined
Now you see it, now you don't

Poof! And it is gone!
With a rumble and a howl
Whole buildings are leveled.
Vehicles tossed around like children's toys
And, the clouds still aren't satisfied.

All of the meteorologists said
They promised that it was going to be bad.
But who would have thought,
It would be this bad?
No one did.

Why weren't we told?
Why weren't we warned?
It wasn't supposed to be like this—
Wave after terrifying wave
Too scared to breath
And yet, it was.

Who would have thought?
Who could have known?
That a house can blowout like this
Debris scattered for miles...without discretion
Flying projectiles of death and destruction

Pieces of a life-lost in wind
Shattered tokens lost forever
One weather blowout,
Windows shattering
My life forever changed.

And yet,
I still stand, grasping hard the hope
The truth that God is in control
After all, He is in control.
And we will rebuild everything once again.

Another weather blowout will happen
Somewhere else, but, all will be alright
Even now, miracles are around
Lives spared
Homes to restore

Because, sadly,
Restoration doesn't happen as quickly
Or easily as,
(we can only dream, me thinks)
Poof! It's there again!


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Noel Mitaxa 05/05/11
You have clearly traced through the emotional turmoil that shock sprays around inside our minds when we can't get a handle on a disaster.
I like the last thought, because it's impossible to click CRTL/ALT/DEL and revert to life beforehand. Yet God's grace can embrace any hurt and turn it into a strength.
Theresa Santy 05/06/11
Poof and it's gone. This poem reminds me -- of a friend who recently lost her mother. Suddenly. Mother and daughter flew accross states together, then poof the mother was gone and daughter had to fly back alone. But there were also some incredible, God-driven miracles that happened on that same trip and since. I know that restoration will come, and I pray for it to come boldly for all who have suffered from recent disasters.
Kate Oliver Webb05/06/11
Such an evocative piece; it's just perfect for the destruction that was, and for the hope that is, and the future that will be. Great job!
Jody Day 05/07/11
Great job putting us in the storm and expressing the sudden devastation. Good title.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 05/07/11
You certainly captured the shock and devastation that a storm can cause.
Laury Hubrich 05/08/11
It's amazing how something that looks strong and sturdy can be gone in a heartbeat. Poof! It's a reminder to us how fleeting life is, for sure.
Loren T. Lowery05/10/11
I think you captured the dismay one goes through in the aftermath of an unexpected and tragic event. I found the 8 and 9th stanzas you wrote to be what spoke to me most profoundly. God, is in control despite what we see about us.
Beth LaBuff 05/10/11
This could have been written on the pages of today's newspapers! Your words and phrases are super! Great work!