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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Outstanding (04/21/11)

TITLE: Muriel and Mabel
By Tracy Nunes


1st grade:
The teacher loved Murielís drawing and put it on her desk.

Mabel couldnít draw, but she told Muriel she liked her picture.

4th grade:
Muriel won the spelling B and was called in front of the school assembly and given a ribbon by the principal.

Mabel couldnít spell very well, but she clapped hard for Muriel.

7th grade:
Muriel was asked to model for a department store and did so well that she was signed on by a modeling agency.

Mabel was never very pretty, but she had a habit of making others feel special with a compliment or a note of encouragement.

11th grade:
Murielís volleyball team won the regionals with her as captain and setter.

Mabel was always kind of clumsy, but she held signs for the team and assisted the team manager with refreshments after a game. The players came to her when they were discouraged.

Muriel and Mabel parted ways. Muriel was given a full academic scholarship to Princeton.

Mabel went to the local community college because it was all she could afford. She prayed for Muriel every day.

Muriel received high academic honors and gave the Bachelorette. She graduated with a degree in Marketing.

Mabel took a year longer to graduate and sometimes just barely passed because she would often stop to help a fellow classmate and pay the academic price. But, she made it with a degree in social work.

Muriel set about every day to make her career dreams come true. She updated her contacts. She widened her social network with intense strategy. Before long she was being asked to give speeches and endorse business products.

Mabel got a job working at the soup kitchen downtown. She helped people with getting a job, finding resources and getting help. Not everyone wanted help but Mabel gave her best to them all, praying God would show them Jesus through her actions more than her words. She would send cards of encouragement to Muriel but only occasionally heard back from her. Usually on the anniversary of their parents death. She sent them anyway
Time went on and Muriel was a big success. She married a man who was wealthy in his own right and they had a daughter who went to the finest schools and had everything she could ever want but her parentís time and attention. She always looked forward to Mabelís cards of encouragement and praise. She gave her life to Jesus because of her auntís love and example.

When Muriel died the papers carried it on the front page and many celebrities, politicians and business moguls came to her funeral. They all praised her for her business acumen.

Mabel died in a small apartment not far from the soup kitchen. Sheíd chosen long ago to live near those she served. They held her memorial at the park and over a thousand grateful souls came and many took turns telling how Mabel had come into their lives when they were at the end of themselves. She told them about Jesus and helped them find their way again. Others, saddened because they had not listened to her, came to express their regret.

Murielís life long quest to be the best, to be outstanding in all she did, painfully brought her no rewards when she faced God. The regret for not listening to Mabel was eternal.

Mabel breathed her last with a prayer on her lips and a smile on her face. She entered into the gates of Heaven in the arms of Jesus, hearing His words in her heart, ďOutstanding, my good and faithful servant.Ē

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Sydney Avey04/28/11
This is very engaging. I wondered if perhaps they are sisters because of the comment on exchanging cards on the aniversary of the death of their parents. How easy to get caught up in excelling at the things the world rewards.
Noel Mitaxa 05/01/11
Love the relentless build-up as you switch between these two characters on your way to the denouement. Very well constructed story.
Leola Ogle 05/01/11
A great reminder that we should pursue things with eternal value while on earth, and not the praise and accolades of men! Outstanding job! God bless!