The Official Writing Challenge
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04/29/11
I thoroughly enjoyed this. You did such a masterful job of drawing the reader in through your MC's eyes. Your descriptions were awesome. And what a neat parallel you drew to those who reject Christ's offer of a secure future. Written like this, it just seems incredulous that anyone would reject that. But yet, like the older couple you portrayed, many do that every day.

Wonderful writing!
Ditto!
05/04/11
Loved this from beginning to end!
Congratulations on ranking 10th in level 4 and 13th overall!
I didn't see it coming! Wonderful idea for a story! You did a great job of making a powerful point! What can I say but.... "Outstanding!"