The Official Writing Challenge
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04/29/11
I thoroughly enjoyed this. You did such a masterful job of drawing the reader in through your MC's eyes. Your descriptions were awesome. And what a neat parallel you drew to those who reject Christ's offer of a secure future. Written like this, it just seems incredulous that anyone would reject that. But yet, like the older couple you portrayed, many do that every day.

Wonderful writing!
05/02/11
Ditto!
05/04/11
Loved this from beginning to end!
05/06/11
Congratulations on ranking 10th in level 4 and 13th overall!
05/14/11
I didn't see it coming! Wonderful idea for a story! You did a great job of making a powerful point! What can I say but.... "Outstanding!"