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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Handout (04/14/11)

TITLE: A Pauper's Extravaganza
By Colin Swann


The air I breathe is the breath you breathed
My hands - a gift that you lent to me
I pound your earth with feet that's yours
To breathe and do and move in you

My thoughts in your presence swirl
A mind you fashioned just for me
This precious gift to steer to truth
To oneness, for which you crave

Days are numbered by your count
Filled by my hope of what could be
Your sun arises as your gift
So that life can live another day

Speech the zenith of your giving
Communion expressed eternally
A twofold gift from you to me
The reciprocation of praise deserved

Random gifts swathed in beauty
A Creator's masterpiece of extravagance
Scattered on me and you and them
Eternal beauty of the Giver's face

Me a pauper, you my Sponsor
Me bereft of hope of gifts
Your love engulfed me with its swamp
To offer me a prince's cache

Your giving heart was rent apart
An ugly spurning of your best
A rejection of grace's masterpiece
The most precious gift of love

What must I do with all you give?
In you, of whom I live and move
And own my nothing but for you
What must I do to mirror Thee?

Give! You are made in the image of me

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Amanda Brogan04/22/11
He has truly given so much more than we could ever repay! And He wants nothing but our love and devotion in return.

Absolutely beautiful! Well flowing, gorgeous wording.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 04/23/11
This is lovely, it brought tears to my eyes. It is a beautiful message that should be shouted from the hilltops.
annie keys04/26/11
VERY nice! I especially loved how you set aside that one single last line--the 'kicker' that brings it all home. I loved it!
Patricia Protzman04/26/11
Beautifully expressed.
Mona Purvis04/26/11
So much truth.
"me a pauper, You my sponsor..." Just love this line.
Gwen Plauche04/26/11
Thank you for sharing this - I really like it!
Loren T. Lowery04/27/11
It is a declaration from God, isn't it? To give. In a love poem, you've beautifully expressed what God has asked us to be as He made us...in His image. Great job.
Kate Oliver Webb04/27/11
This just has the glory of God's giving love all over it. Thank you!
Edmond Ng 04/28/11
This is a poem that reflects how we [should] feel about God, like the psalmist in Psalm 8:4-5.

What is man that You take thought of him, And the son of man that You care for him? Yet You have made him a little lower than God, And You crown him with glory and majesty! (Psalm 8:4-5 NAS)

I especially like the part you show how we should respond to God and ask "What must I do to mirror Thee?" Excellent writing.

Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 04/28/11
Congratulations in placing 8th in level 3 and 19th overall.
Anne Linington05/01/11
Hello Colin. How are you? Do you know Ruth Vickers? We met on Premier Community where I post most of my writing these days- occasionally here and at Worldwidebiblestudies. I have just posted today's sermon: "A Twin looks at Thomas Didymus, the Twin.
Linda Goergen05/04/11

I agree with Edmond Ng, this reminds me of a psalm. Really enjoyed!

All thy works shall praise thee, O LORD; and thy saints shall bless thee. Psalm 145:10