The Official Writing Challenge
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Nicely written, with good descriptions, a favorite phrase: “from rags to wishes”. I felt a little nervous about the MC’s motives because of his attention to the little girl (my own ‘paranoia’ talking) so was glad at the job offer at the end. Also a glitch for me was that I didn’t “see” the transition from standing in line to the room with the chair.
I'm a sucker for a happy ending, especially where few find one. Good job.
Good dialogue, good story, nicely written. I was confused as to why a reporter would be able to offer her anything such as a voucher or a shorter time in line.
The dialogue flowed nicely in this...holding my attention. Your work here makes me want to try writing like I am new at dialogue and short stories. Thanks for being my teacher.
Lillian, I'm going to feature this story in the Front Page Showcase for the week of June 27. Look for it on the FaithWriters home page--and congratulations!