The Official Writing Challenge
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04/14/11
We never know the impact we have in someone's else world.
That's the message I got from your story. Perhaps a bit more dialogue would have enhance the message you wanted to "show."
04/18/11
Great message - I was thrown by her frustration as she left the boat, followed by her hope a moment later as she entered the house. And I agree - a bit more dialogue would be great.
I was drawn in by the title...putting her thoughts into quotation marks or italics might help some...just a thought....Your character shows inner strength!
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