The Official Writing Challenge
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04/18/11
Good story with a great message. Well done.
04/18/11
Entertaining, well-told story. Lots of vivid detail.
This had me holding my breath in suspense. I could picture this as if I were watching a TV-show. The ending came kind of sudden, I want to know if the exposure will be enoughto hurt the explore plus so much more. You could make this a chapter or a preface to a novel. Nicely done.
04/20/11
Very descriptive and suspenseful, even with some minor grammatical errors. Loved the touch of humour at the end, but I'm wondering if the guy's nausea wasn't the onset of "atomic" ache???
Congratulations on your 'Highly Commended' win.